2nd year IB ANL - kill my resume
I am looking to lateral to a less specialized group (e.g. M&A or cash-flow driven industry group). Please be brutal to my resume.
Thanks
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your resume is rotated to the right 90 degrees.
You really need to work on your resume.
QuackQuack i fixed this for you. Constructive feedback much appreciated.
Did you scan this? You know you can upload the actual pdf you create from Word, right?
I wouldn't say that the service was mandatory, makes it sound like you didn't want to do it. You have more space, explain your other experiences more. Break down the main part into bullets, it reads like an essay
If you still need help, pm me
coochiemane, I know I can upload this as a pdf. I'm a bit paranoid that somebody would download the pdf, unlock it and then remove the blacklining to be able to see my identity - therefore the scan.
LongandShortofit, thanks for the comments. I am not sure whether I should focus too much on my experience outside of my Analyst stint as that is probably the only thing that is relevant to other firms - would be great to receive more input on this from other users!
Guys, any more feedback much appreciated - thanks!!!
You can always upload it to Razume, which eliminates any chance of unlocking.
More bullets - too much text in the first area. The indentation for your bullets is WAY too large.
Write in phrases, stop writing in sentences. This isn't a published document, it's your resume. When you write in sentences there is a lot of superfluous diction that should be removed
"marketing materials"? just call it a pitch book anyways even if it wasn't
stop talking about the deal, talk about YOURSELF. you're spending time updating the guy reading your resume on the status of the deal when you can spend that time telling how you impacted it
Colons don't work the way you think they do. If you insist on writing like that use a dash instead
If it were my resume I would forget about the exchange semester and maximize space talking about your experiences. Surely you didn't intend to leave the second investment banking experience blank? Some of your other internships are solid and could use at least a single bullet point if not more.
Main thing: Phrases with action verbs, not sentences with descriptions
You look like a hardworking guy with good experience. Fix your resume. It needs work. Eyeball test shows me that there is too much text at the top and a lot of blank whitespace for god knows what reason. The way your resume is written indicates that you think you employers will be impressed by positions and status. They are not - they are concerned with experiences, and in particular what YOU did. Add some descriptions to those positions and let them know how you added value to your firm
One more thing - you appear to be at the stage in your career where irrelevant work experiences should be omitted. You are no longer trying to break into Wall Street, you are trying to move up the ladder.
That mandatory social service thing is taking up several lines of space. Either get rid of it or put it at the bottom of the resume in that section. As an American I have a vague idea of what A-levels are but from what I know of it, it does not belong on your resume. Like I said when you are breaking in, yes, but when you are moving up the only thing that matters is advanced degrees and your bachelor's.
Thanks Take_it_to_the_bank – very good feedback, much appreciated.
remove 'Politics'
And put some detail! Instead of listing single words of your interest explain how you participate.How and where do you skii and how often? Where do you play guitar, how many years, did you have any notable performances?
You can always print-screen and control-v in Paint, blocking out anything with black paint.
Also take a look at Mergers and Inquisitions resume template for experience hire. You need more bullets and sub-bullets. And expand on your internships
Guys,
thanks all for your input. I had another crack at this, please let me know your comments (scroll to first topic entry to see CV).
Thanks
Much improved. Most of what I'm seeing at this point are minor syntax errors that are largely a matter of preference. For example, I find it much cleaner to write "July 2009" instead of 07/2009, and I would say "Present" (capitalized) instead of "current". "July 2009 - current" sounds awkward.
It's generally a good rule of thumb to have even margins all around. I can tell your right/left margins are smaller than your top/bottom margins. So, reduce the top/bottom margins (make sure none is less than 0.5).
You say you want to go to M&A. You did an M&A internship. Add at least two more bullet point because that summer analyst stint is VERY relevant. If you need to cut down the position below it (reconciliation stuff) then do so because you have to focus on that M&A internship. The space granted by the smaller top/bottom margins will allow you to add more information.
You have to be very precise on exactly how many lines you are using. I am noticing things you may not be noticing.
1) Your name and address is four lines. Three lines is the standard. Axe whatever isn't necessary.
2) Generally you write numbers that are very small as "one" and not 1.
3) "Working on 1 restructuring deal, prepared valuation analysis and client presentation currently evolving into 1 transaction" - rephrase this so it only takes up 1 line, perhaps chop off the last part
4) Give some consideration to even omitting the "Apprenticeship Program". If you choose to keep it, it's ideal to write at least 1 line about it - I personally don't like putting down jobs/internships without any context.
5) Scholarships don't mean that much. Put only the most relevant/prestigious scholarship and combine Grades and Scholarships onto one line
With these steps, you know have afforded yourself as many as 6-7 more lines of space where you can write something about INVESTMENT BANKING and M&A. Remember, that is the goal.
Get rid of the irrelevant stuff and write about the target job. Don't think of a resume as a candidate profile, but as a targeted proposal. You are proposing to this new firm that you are qualified for the M&A program. Would scholarships help you get that job? Probably not. Would talking about what you know about M&A help? Yes.
Some of the more dedicated candidates will revise the resume for every position they apply to. For people into their career and not at the entry-level stage, this is a better path - being very specific and targeted.
OP, have you taken Take It To The Bank's comments and updated your resume?
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