another non target playing catch up

Title says it all, I'm another non target looking for help with my resume. All advice is welcome no matter how harsh I understand I'm up against a big learning curve and will take any comments in stride.

Thanks for all the help everyone, here is the new version from M&I's template

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"Note: Just checked what Garamond was (never heard of it), and it appears okay. The attached pdf does not look like the Garamond I saw in my Word. Still, I'd just use a normal default font. Content/substance trumps style." --Anihilist

And your resume looks empty. What do you do with your time? Go google resume and resume books to see the kind of things people used to beef up their resume. Your resume honestly looks anorexic.

GOOD LUCK

 
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Going to rough you up here..

a.) Horrible, horrible, horrible font b.) Bad lay-out for contact info; try to consolidate into one or two lines directly under name c.) "An accredited university to The Association to Advance Collegiate Schools of Business"? What in the hell does this mean? This makes it sound like you go to University of Phoenix. d.) Did I mention horrible font? e.) Too much relevant coursework, it's all over the place. Specialize it to the job you're applying for. f.) Describe "Outdoor Emergency Care Technician" more.. What environment were you in? What were some "high pressure situations"? Did you save any lives/do anything interesting? Could capitalize on this. g.) Quantify "Seasonal Snowboard Instructor" more.. How many people did you instruct? What was your customer retention/customer satisfaction rate? Did you get any accolades? h.) "Skill sets" bullets/start of text aren't lined up i.) Take off "Highly sociable, self-motivated and enthusiastic" and "Exceptional communication skills in team settings" .. These are worthless and meaningless. Your resume should exude these qualities/traits.. "If you have to tell people you are, you aren't."

Overall the resume is very rough. This is very judgmental of me, but you seem like you want to go to the Street after watching the Wolf of Wall Street with the frat bros. Work on quantifying the resume, changing the font, and networking (you sound outdoorsy--use this to your advantage). You sound interesting based on your experiences -- good luck.

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broadstbully:

Going to rough you up here..

a.) Horrible, horrible, horrible font
b.) Bad lay-out for contact info; try to consolidate into one or two lines directly under name
c.) "An accredited university to The Association to Advance Collegiate Schools of Business"? What in the hell does this mean? This makes it sound like you go to University of Phoenix.
d.) Did I mention horrible font?
e.) Too much relevant coursework, it's all over the place. Specialize it to the job you're applying for.
f.) Describe "Outdoor Emergency Care Technician" more.. What environment were you in? What were some "high pressure situations"? Did you save any lives/do anything interesting? Could capitalize on this.
g.) Quantify "Seasonal Snowboard Instructor" more.. How many people did you instruct? What was your customer retention/customer satisfaction rate? Did you get any accolades?
h.) "Skill sets" bullets/start of text aren't lined up
i.) Take off "Highly sociable, self-motivated and enthusiastic" and "Exceptional communication skills in team settings" .. These are worthless and meaningless. Your resume should exude these qualities/traits.. "If you have to tell people you are, you aren't."

Overall the resume is very rough. This is very judgmental of me, but you seem like you want to go to the Street after watching the Wolf of Wall Street with the frat bros. Work on quantifying the resume, changing the font, and networking (you sound outdoorsy--use this to your advantage). You sound interesting based on your experiences -- good luck.

I appreciate you taking time to review my résumé. Brutal honesty is good, I wouldn't want to give off a frat bro wolf of Wall Street vibe. I do want to follow up by asking what experience do you have with reviewing resumes?

 

Topical observation; fix that font asap. Looks like 6th grade PP presentation.

Formatting wise, check out M&I's resume template.

People demand freedom of speech as a compensation for freedom of thought which they seldom use.
 
Anihilist:

Topical observation; fix that font asap. Looks like 6th grade PP presentation.

Formatting wise, check out M&I's resume template.

Garamond is that bad of a font?
 

Yes. A font won't win you any favors, but can lose them. Just use Times New Roman or Calibri.

Note: Just checked what Garamond was (never heard of it), and it appears okay. The attached pdf does not look like the Garamond I saw in my Word. Still, I'd just use a normal default font. Content/substance trumps style.

People demand freedom of speech as a compensation for freedom of thought which they seldom use.
 

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