Awkward Email
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In a 3 year teaching fellowship program (think Teach for America with waaaaay lower name recognition). In my third year and looking to go into consulting. I had reached out to an alum from my school who is an accounting partner at a mid-tier firm. We talked back in March on the phone knowing that I would be planning for a fall 2014 start and he offered to put me in touch with a partner in the consulting wing of the company. He said he loves helping out alumni from my school and all that jazz, so I think it's a good connection.
I sent him my resume the day after the call. But I haven't been in touch since then (yes, I know I should have been proactive). So now I'm trying to restart the conversation. Wondering how I should start the email out. Planning to use the same email thread and go with:
Mr. XYZ,
I hope you have been doing well. As I am starting my third year in the XYZ program, I am now focusing more intently on entering consulting upon the completion of the program. I'm still very interested in exploring opportunities at (firm name). I remember you said you had a contact in (city name), is it still possible to get in touch with them? I'm happy to talk on the phone again if you'd like.
Thank you
-Name
Thoughts? What would be your way of approaching it? Should I just ask to talk on the phone again? I think the last sentence is especially painful.
You forgot a word after "get in touch".
Thanks, I'll edit it, good catch
the whole email sounds stiff to me, with some extra words, although if you don't really know the person, i guess that's fine? i'd change the part after "I'm still very interested in exploring opportunities at (firm name)" though, because you're right, it sounds forced. i'd just ask to speak to them on the phone, and if they agree, ask for the contact then. i mean, for all you know, that contact is at a different firm now. as for the last bit of the email, i'd probably go with something like "I'm still very interested in exploring opportunities at (firm), and it'd be great to hear your thoughts. Would you be available for a phone call?" and then end it.
Thanks for the advice curious. So you would suggest something more along these lines?
Mr. XYZ,
I hope you have been doing well. As you may remember, I am starting my third year in the XYZ program. I'm still very interested in exploring opportunities at (firm name) and it would be great to hear your thoughts. Would you be available for another phone call?
Thank you
Still sounds very stiff to me. Essentially I want him to get me in touch with the appropriate people on the advisory side. We talked about it before and he was more than willing but he was starting to go on college trips with his kid so that's probably why he didn't respond before.
Anymore advice? I would appreciate the help. I'm fairly good at the complete cold email, but this is a little more awkward...
Hi [guy's name],
I enjoyed our conversation in March and [something interesting that he said about his job] has really stuck with me since we last spoke. As you may remember, I am finishing up my [program name] after graduating from [your school] and am determining my next step after the program concludes. You mentioned that I should get back in touch with you as my program was nearing the end because you had a few other people you thought I should meet.
I appreciate your help and advice to a fellow alumni. What's a good time for you to catch up?
Best, hieverybody
Thanks for the advice DickFuld, this sounds a lot smoother than what I have now, and I've changed my draft to be more like this, anybody else have any input before I send this off?
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