Format is the industry standard, nothing to change.

I am not an English expert but I think there are a few grammatical mistakes: - "Redaction and proofing legal documents" - should be "Redacting and proofing" or "Redaction of legal documents and proofing ..." I don't know what would be the best way to word it but there is something to change here - "Responsible in performing end of quarter manual and automatic " I think it is more correct to say "Responsible for performing"

Overall, I also think you should detail more your work experience and show where you performed.

Ps: if I were you I would not put my real name on a forum

 

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Education section: - Regent's University is missing the apostrophe - "International" in your uni major starts with a lower case letter. This is done the same way in the European Business school section. Unless this is intentional, change it. - managing real estate investments starts with a capital "M" but everything else in the list starts with lower case. Either start everything in lower case, or capitalize everything. - "quantitative analysis of investments and finance" sounds wonky. I would write "quantitative analysis of investments, finance, etc..." - Bachelor of Law has "Law" written in all lower case, since this is a title I would capitalize. - Cumulative GPA for the last school is followed by a semi-colon vs. a colon which looks off (; vs. :) - When describing your dissertation for the last school, you are halfway between referring to a single REIT and REIT's in general. Either say "...of real estate investment trusts" or "...a real estate investment trust"

Work Experience section: - Lead with action verbs here: "Updated the databases, performed the credit analysis, performed EoQ whatever" - Last bullet for the second job needs to be reworded: "Liased w/ clients or whatever" - Add more quantification and try to show the effects resulting from what you did.

I'm too lazy to go through the rest. As an overall note, this is full of grammatical errors. Take another look, and maybe ask a native English speaker to read through it and rephrase the stuff that needs correcting.

Also, some of your bullet points have periods at the end and some don't. Either consistently put them there or consistently omit them, otherwise it just looks half-assed. All-in-all this still needs some work.

 

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