Is my Cover Letter too bold? Any advice appreciated

Hey!
I wanted to ask in this sub-forum because I feel I'd receive more quality advice here. I'd prefer to pm my cover letter rather than make my cover letter public. I think I've done it in an unconventional, maybe weird way. Please let me know if you'd be willing to take a look, thanks:)

my resume is attached as well, in case there's anything blatantly wrong.

 

The SAT section is called math, not quant. Don't see how being a member of a finance speaker series constitutes leadership experience; seems more like something for a training/certification section at the bottom. Might want to make your GPA to two decimal places so they don't think you bumped up a 3.75 to 3.8. You have your expected graduation date, so why do you have graduating in 3 years as well? Also, not feeling the book list. Other than that, looks pretty good.

 

Are you using huge font? The formatting looks kind of weird as you're not fitting many words on each line.

Also, as others have noticed, take out the books list and remove the part about graduating in 3 years. You should already have the dates in there for it so people can deduce that themselves. It looks rather pretentious to write "Graduating in 3 years".

 

Can you elaborate more on your study abroad to replace the Speaker Series? I personally wouldn't put the Speaker Series down unless I was on a committee or something to help plan it or something like that.

I would put the engineering clubs anyway. I know quite a few engineers who had no finance experience and they got hired by BB's. Not being a finance major or having a leadership role in a finance club doesn't exactly hinder you as much as you'd think.

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