Ripping apart my Consulting CV

Hey guys,

I would be really grateful if I could get some advice on my CV for Consulting in the UK. I've been refining it for a while now and have reached a point where I'm happy with it...so I need you to make me feel awful about it and tear it apart!

Here it is: http://www.razume.com/documents/27396

Some questions:
I wanted to emphasise the fact that I come from an international background and that's why I have all the schools up. Is this worth the space it takes up?
It's one and a half pages, should I chop at it to reduce it to one?
Should I to take out the Pharmaceuticals work experience and just put it in the activities section like I have done at the bottom?
Have I written too much about SIFE and not enough about my internship?

I'd really appreciate any feedback

Thanks in advance!

Edit: here is an edited version taking on board the suggestions so far (on .docx it's one page, when converted to .pdf its two for some reason) :
http://www.razume.com/documents/27413

 
  1. Make it one page (although I'm not sure what the norm is in the UK... Declaration of Independence, 1 page; Magna Carta, 1 page; Rights of Man, 1 page; your resume,... 1 page)

  2. Lose the references section, takes up too much space and they'll ask if they want them.

  3. Lose the Pharma job, Too much space and you have much more relevant work exp.

  4. The schools, if you need space, could be listed as "International coursework: Uni [country]" It's good to show, but right now you're taking up a lot of space with it.

I'll do what I can to help ya'll. But, the game's out there, and it's play or get played.
 
Best Response

1) Listing all those schools isn't a good way to emphasize your international background. (Listing your middle school? Really?) Just put one line in skills that gives the international perspective.

2) Get rid of the "referees available" section. (I'm assuming this means references.) Modern resume faux paus.

3) Fit to one page. Downsize the font and decrease the spacing if you can without it getting crowded.

4) Use the same tense for all your bullets (i.e. "focus" vs. "resolved")

5) Your "action words" are kind of weird. (e.g. "put accross" "had the opportunity" "being the liason") Use strong words like "implemented" or "directed" or "accomplished".

6) Any bullets that are over 2 lines will never be read. Break it out.

7) Don't use third-level bullets.

8) Get rid of the "proficient in MS and advanced in Excel" bullet. If you're that good at Excel, give us something concrete (e.g. VBA programming, Microsoft proficiency certificate, etc.) Otherwise it just sounds dumb.

9) Do a general review for sentence structure consistency. (e.g. your last line should read something like "Active manager of paper portfolios, self-taught guitar player, frequent European traveler" or "Actively manage a paper portfolio, play acoustic guitar, travel in Europe")

 

Thanks so much for the feedback! Way more insight than I even hoped for, you guys are great. I improved it with your suggestions and edited the link into the first post. I had to convert it to pdf from docx. It was a page on .docx but it ended up being a page and a line on pdf...

Any last suggestions?

 

Second version looks much better. Only more criticism I have is that all the bullet points are on the same indent. Not that the content needs to be changed, but I would either lose the bullet points at the top--or put a hierarchy in the Exp section.

I'll do what I can to help ya'll. But, the game's out there, and it's play or get played.
 

Looks good.

First off, you always want to send a resume in PDF format. Maybe decreasing the bottom margin in Word will eliminate the 2 page problem? If not, find another way.

1) The general rule is to write out any number less than 10 (e.g. nine not 9)

2) More quantified results would help take your resume to the next level. For example, "successfully arranged four prospective client meetings resulting in annual commission of XXX." You do a good job with this already, but try to show the impact with each of your bullets. Anything that didn't have an impact isn't worthy of being put on your resume (unless it's ridiculously impressive in some way), so delete any of those and find something that did to replace it. Keep in mind you don't have to change the world to make an impact. As a student/intern, almost anything you do to have a quantifiable impact will look good.

3) Make the re-elected line a separate bullet and word it as an accomplishment.

 

a good resume will have me looking at the most important section of your resume instantly - yours does not do that so a lazy analyst will just look at your school and reject you because of your school

 

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