Hello guys,
Just wondering what your opinions are. Sophomore transfer non-target looking for a boutique IB or PE summer internship.
http://www.razume.com/doc/3/a685192a-5a1f-4722-93f4-1da6c6674704-1
Thank you
EDIT - Updated
http://www.razume.com/doc/3/88cedaff-3705-4512-8ef3-300070b69fc1-1
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In my opinion there is just way too much going on in the work and leadership section. You should probably split up work and leadership, and then expand on at most two experiences each. Good luck!
1: break up the Work and Leadership into two sections. Work as one section. Leadership as the other. Put the Bentley Investment Group, Personal Investment Portfolio, and Wall Street Training Course, and Bryant Suite Founders under "Leadership."
This makes it much easier to read rather than sifting through all of that to see what was your work experience with other companies compared with endowments and personal work.
2: Under Technical Skills, change the Wall Street Training thing to say either Basic or Intermediate "Financial Modeling and Corporate Valuation knowledge"
No need to repeat what you've already said.
3: Take out the "Readings" section at the bottom. I'd suggest scratching out that whole thing and putting under the "Interests" section above it both WSJ and "Reading Financial Newspapers/Magazines"
These changes will make your resume look much cleaner and more organized. Overall, a solid resume for a non-target.
I agree that you should also split up work & leadership into 2 sections since that one section is pretty overwhelming. Also couldn't help but notice, you don't have a time frame for your role in personal investment portfolio? I think you just blocked out the place..I guess just to be consistent
Wow, I did not catch that. Thanks.
Here is an updated version. What do you guys think? Thanks
http://www.razume.com/doc/3/88cedaff-3705-4512-8ef3-300070b69fc1-1
Wow, I did not catch that. Thanks.
Here is an updated version. What do you guys think? Thanks
http://www.razume.com/doc/3/88cedaff-3705-4512-8ef3-300070b69fc1-1[/quo…]
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Thanks, Patrick
Haha no problem. Is the personal investment portfolio a club? I can't really tell since usually you have a description of it under the title. You can indicate your leadership role below it, on the same line as the date
I'm not sure if the wall street training and your university's investment group are leadership experience.
Its not a club, its a pool of family money, mainly retirement funds. Anything I can do to make the distinction between it being a club and a personal investment account? What could I add as a "position" title to make that apparent?
This is what I was thinking too. Is there something I can change "Leadership Experience" to in order to include all the rest of that stuff. Maybe "Additional Relevant Experience"?
Thanks Guys
Additional Relevant Experience sounds a bit weird. How about "Leadership & Activities" You can also change your bottom section to "Additional Information" if you think you're repeating the activities part your bentley investment group sounds more like work experience though, how come it is under leadership experience?
Your mom does not happen to work at CIM in I think it was private placement? If so I interviewed with her.
Nothing really just fit based. It was more of practice for me going into IBD recruiting next month. Ill be realistic with you though, look for a F500 company to work at this summer, and network as hard as possible to land a IBD or P/E internship for your junior year. Seeing your GPA at Bryant and relevant work experience I think that landing a P/E or Boutique IBD internship will be very very difficult unless you have major connections. Also you absolutely need your GPA at Bentley to be 3.5+.
Yeah I asked her how the interviews went. She said a lot of the people didn't even know what fixed income was haha. She also mentioned someone who talked a lot about their personal investment portfolio and in going through your posts real quick, it might have been you. Not too sure who she hired or if they even gave out an offer this time around though.
But regarding the internships, I landed one at a PE/Mezz fund near my home for the winter through one of the kids here at Bentley. I am working really hard to get my GPA up to par too, but spending an equal amount on networking as that makes a huge difference between you and the 9000 other applicants who have 3.5's as I'm sure you know. Best of luck in your job search.
OP, How do you go about networking with alums right now as a transfer student and not having a GPA yet?
I'm sort of in the same boat, but thought reaching out to alums now without having a gpa at the school yet is a little weird, maybe it's just me.
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