Which one for IBD

Hi guys i've uploaded two different resumes. Please tell me which one should I go with. I need to send these resumes to my alums ASAP. I know there not the best but will alums passing my resume along I believe I have a good chance, thanks.

http://www.razume.com/documents/21435

http://www.razume.com/documents/21375

 

For both of them you say "Bachelor of Business Administration..." but it should be "Bachelor of Science in Business Administration" or "Bachelor of Arts in Business Administration" (obviously, which one you choose depends on your program).

I like the first resume better. Though, you should fix the dates of your second internship (the spacing and dash is inconsistent with the other two) and I don't like your second bullet point under leadership & achievements. "Tremendous leadership and responsibility".....? Really?

 
wanderer:
For both of them you say "Bachelor of Business Administration..." but it should be "Bachelor of Science in Business Administration" or "Bachelor of Arts in Business Administration" (obviously, which one you choose depends on your program).

I like the first resume better. Though, you should fix the dates of your second internship (the spacing and dash is inconsistent with the other two) and I don't like your second bullet point under leadership & achievements. "Tremendous leadership and responsibility".....? Really?

BBA

 
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wanderer:
For both of them you say "Bachelor of Business Administration..." but it should be "Bachelor of Science in Business Administration" or "Bachelor of Arts in Business Administration" (obviously, which one you choose depends on your program).

I like the first resume better. Though, you should fix the dates of your second internship (the spacing and dash is inconsistent with the other two) and I don't like your second bullet point under leadership & achievements. "Tremendous leadership and responsibility".....? Really?

BBA

My bad. Whoops.

 

Several things;

  1. What the fuck is Wallstreet "PRERP"? Fix that shit and any other spelling errors.

  2. Do you really have absolutely no extra curricular activities/clubs/actual leadership experience? If you do, add that fucking shit to your resume. Without it, you look like just another clueless Indian kid who's boring as shit. If not, start joining shit. What the fuck are you waiting for? Play a club sport, start your own club, ...

  3. Just my opinion, but get rid of Bloomberg terminal, MS office and lead sales associate lines. They seem unnecessary and repetitive, unless they are their just to fill up white space.

Everything else seems great. I'd go with the first resume, but I don't see it making a huge difference. Best of luck to you.

 
Best Response
reddog23:
Several things;
  1. What the fuck is Wallstreet "PRERP"? Fix that shit and any other spelling errors.

  2. Do you really have absolutely no extra curricular activities/clubs/actual leadership experience? If you do, add that fucking shit to your resume. Without it, you look like just another clueless Indian kid who's boring as shit. If not, start joining shit. What the fuck are you waiting for? Play a club sport, start your own club, ...

  3. Just my opinion, but get rid of Bloomberg terminal, MS office and lead sales associate lines. They seem unnecessary and repetitive, unless they are their just to fill up white space.

Everything else seems great. I'd go with the first resume, but I don't see it making a huge difference. Best of luck to you.

LOL. That "everything else seems great" really threw me off.

Also, to add to that, fix your dates and put your current role first. Make the appropriate bullet points into past tense.

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