Comments (19)

Sep 25, 2011

Why does everybody put proficient in word, excel, ppt? DONT DO THAT IT LOOKS STUPID

Sep 25, 2011

ok so if i take it off will it be assumed that I already know it? Anything else? Good or bad?

I Got a dollar and a dream...

Sep 25, 2011

you need to adjust format... parentheses, capital letters, alignment, - / , etc. for instance [06/2011] - [08-2011] and [10/2009 - [04/2010]

Sep 25, 2011
thejoker:

you need to adjust format... parentheses, capital letters, alignment, - / , etc. for instance [06/2011] - [08-2011] and [10/2009 - [04/2010]

ok will do thanks.

I Got a dollar and a dream...

Sep 25, 2011

add spaces in technical skills, capitalize "martial" and "jersey", I dont know what INROADS is,

Sep 25, 2011

This is just fucking awful. Go through this again by yourself, because this shit is straight up sloppy. If this is your best attempt, then maybe you should look into other careers. No one is going to do your work for you.

Sep 25, 2011
Flake:

This is just fucking awful. Go through this again by yourself, because this shit is straight up sloppy. If this is your best attempt, then maybe you should look into other careers. No one is going to do your work for you.

Fuck you pussy. Take you bitching elsewhere.

I Got a dollar and a dream...

Sep 25, 2011
BankMonkey21:
Flake:

This is just fucking awful. Go through this again by yourself, because this shit is straight up sloppy. If this is your best attempt, then maybe you should look into other careers. No one is going to do your work for you.

Fuck you pussy. Take you bitching elsewhere.

to be fair, your resume is incredibly sloppy....and you did ask people to "destroy it"

don't really understand why people ask for resume critiques when there are basic grammar/formatting issues all over the place

Sep 25, 2011

Like the above said, there are quite a few formatting issues here. Some that I noticed with a quick glance:

  • You have periods in some lines but not in others
  • What's with all the brackets?
  • Capitalize "Excel" in your second to last bullet for your first listed PVH Corp internship
  • Uncapitalize "analyzed" in your first bullet for your second listed PVH Corp internship
  • Capitalize "Product" in "Banking Product Specialist"
  • Is there an extra space in front of "necessary" in the first bullet of the Taking the First Step Program?
  • In general, your bullets are job descriptions as opposed to explanations on how you added value or what the result of your analysis was

There are plenty of other ways to improve this, take some time to carefully comb through line by line to make sure formatting is consistent. Best of luck.

Sep 25, 2011
South Sea Tulip:

Like the above said, there are quite a few formatting issues here. Some that I noticed with a quick glance:

  • You have periods in some lines but not in others
  • What's with all the brackets?
  • Capitalize "Excel" in your second to last bullet for your first listed PVH Corp internship
  • Uncapitalize "analyzed" in your first bullet for your second listed PVH Corp internship
  • Capitalize "Product" in "Banking Product Specialist"
  • Is there an extra space in front of "necessary" in the first bullet of the Taking the First Step Program?
  • In general, your bullets are job descriptions as opposed to explanations on how you added value or what the result of your analysis was

There are plenty of other ways to improve this, take some time to carefully comb through line by line to make sure formatting is consistent. Best of luck.

Thanks. I appreciate it

I Got a dollar and a dream...

Sep 25, 2011

technical skills are things like c++, eviews, etc. not fucking bloomberg. just say "proficient in..." How did you compare things? p/e ratios etc? I wouldn't give this resume a second look.

Sep 25, 2011

might want to reconsider the interests section - "motorcycles"??

Sep 26, 2011

Just completely remove the interests section unless you have something completely off-the-hook which you can talk about for two hours to a complete stranger.

Sep 26, 2011
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