Help: Feedback on Cover Letter

Hi everyone!
I am applying to Credit Suisse for IBD (Milan) and Equities Derivatives (London) offcycle programs and the application for both positions requires only a one page cover letter. I would deeply appreciate any feedback on my document regarding its structure, the content, grammar (I am not an english native speaker) or whatever you can spot please. Thank you very much in advance.

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Comments (2)

Jan 28, 2016 - 1:45pm

You have mentioned you are undertaking a MSc so would add your BS or School name on CL as well.
Not passionate of but passionate about.
Also, in one sentence you mention "friends" would consider something more professional like "amongst my network"

Anyway it is a well structured CL, good luck with the application process.

Jan 28, 2016 - 6:45pm

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