My resume- I think it's good, but can you make it better?

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Hi everyone,

I try not to make these threads too often, and this is actually my first time. Long time lurker though, so I think my resume should be WSO/M&I approved.

Sorry for all the censers. If it's too distracting, please let me know and I'll make another one.

basic info:
I go to a regional target
I interned at a small boutique this past summer

and that's it! Please let me know what you think. Thanks!

EDIT: thanks for the comments, they were very helpful! i've removed the link for the sake of recruiting season.

Comments (19)

Aug 30, 2012

Stacked, good job OP makes me jelly

Aug 30, 2012

Really you're listing Cold Calling?

Aug 30, 2012
G.M.Trevelyan:

Really you're listing Cold Calling?

LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL.

The HBS guys have MAD SWAGGER. They frequently wear their class jackets to boston bars, strutting and acting like they own the joint. They just ooze success, confidence, swagger, basically attributes of alpha males.

Aug 30, 2012
blastoise:

Stacked, good job OP makes me jelly

Thanks blastoise, appreciate it.

G.M.Trevelyan:

Really you're listing Cold Calling?

Haha yeah I was debating that. When I was making my resume sophomore year, my advisor said it was a good idea, so I added it, especially because I felt I didn't have any 'real skills' besides being proficient in another language. I mean, I know Microsoft Office doesn't really count either, but I just added it to fill space lol. I'll remove it.

YushinOkami:

Why the fuck does this resume use a proprietary template that I've used for 3 years? I highly doubt that this person is a member of the HBAA at Richard Ivey School of Business at The University of Western Ontario. Fuck off OP.

Lol what? An upperclassmen gave me their resume couple years ago, and I basically copied his format. What's wrong with it?

Aug 30, 2012
neon green:
blastoise:

Stacked, good job OP makes me jelly

Thanks blastoise, appreciate it.

G.M.Trevelyan:

Really you're listing Cold Calling?

Haha yeah I was debating that. When I was making my resume sophomore year, my advisor said it was a good idea, so I added it, especially because I felt I didn't have any 'real skills' besides being proficient in another language. I mean, I know Microsoft Office doesn't really count either, but I just added it to fill space lol. I'll remove it.

YushinOkami:

Why the fuck does this resume use a proprietary template that I've used for 3 years? I highly doubt that this person is a member of the HBAA at Richard Ivey School of Business at The University of Western Ontario. Fuck off OP.

Lol what? An upperclassmen gave me their resume couple years ago, and I basically copied his format. What's wrong with it?

I find it very suspicious that only hours after i post my resume, another resume with an almost identical style (same kind of raised lettering, spacing after line, font, etc) show up...

Aug 30, 2012

Why the fuck does this resume use a proprietary template that I've used for 3 years? I highly doubt that this person is a member of the HBAA at Richard Ivey School of Business at The University of Western Ontario. Fuck off OP.

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Aug 30, 2012
YushinOkami:

Why the fuck does this resume use a proprietary template that I've used for 3 years? I highly doubt that this person is a member of the HBAA at Richard Ivey School of Business at The University of Western Ontario. Fuck off OP.

Definitely looks 'proprietary' to me...

To OP:
I think 'Summer Analyst Intern' is indented a little too far (not sure if this is a Razume formatting issue)
Not a big fan of having 'cold calling' listed and I'd reword 'experience with Bloomberg terminal'
May 2014 graduation? So this would be for SA positions?

Aug 30, 2012

Don't flatter yourself too much, I've had this resume format long before you posted yours.

Anyone else have any constructive criticism? It would be much appreciated.

Aug 30, 2012

solid...any financial modeling experience though? Don't see enough buzzwords in your experience section of IBD but with your GPA and awards you should get interviews. Just be ready, because then GPA doesnt really matter.

Sep 2, 2012
WallStreetOasis.com:

solid...any financial modeling experience though? Don't see enough buzzwords in your experience section of IBD but with your GPA and awards you should get interviews. Just be ready, because then GPA doesnt really matter.

Unfortunately, I did not get as much modeling experience as I would have liked. I was a sophomore, and I think they brought me in a little too slowly. But hopefully M&I/WSO guides will be enough for the interviews.

Plender:

To OP:
I think 'Summer Analyst Intern' is indented a little too far (not sure if this is a Razume formatting issue)
Not a big fan of having 'cold calling' listed and I'd reword 'experience with Bloomberg terminal'
May 2014 graduation? So this would be for SA positions?

Good catch! It was indented 1 space too much to the right. Wish I had your attention to detail lol. And yeah its for SA positions.

RichardPennybags:

Hey guys, could somebody tell me what the name of that font is?

It's garamond.

Aug 30, 2012

Solid. No need for bullets in your skills/interests section. NSCS isn't really considered prestigious or an award (it's like Who's Who... no merit per se), so I don't know about putting it on..

Currently: future psychiatrist (med school =P)
Previously: investor relations (top consulting firm), M&A consulting (Big 4), M&A banking (MM)

Sep 1, 2012

Great resume. Also not a fan of the 'cold calling' bit nor the NSCS. Other than that, maybe limit the VP role description in your activities and expand more on big names like IBM and ML. But still awesome.

Sep 2, 2012

Hey guys, could somebody tell me what the name of that font is?

"Every man should lose a battle in his youth, so he does not lose a war when he is old"

Sep 2, 2012

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"Every man should lose a battle in his youth, so he does not lose a war when he is old"

Sep 2, 2012

This is a great resume? No offense but this resume set new lows... or at least your expectations are shite.

Sep 2, 2012

Also, I wanted to thank everyone for the responses. They have been very helpful, and I appreciate all of your inputs.

Sep 2, 2012

Question for everyone: memoranda or memorandums? Have always used the former but it seems the latter is accepted. Not sure which is appropriate.

Currently: future psychiatrist (med school =P)
Previously: investor relations (top consulting firm), M&A consulting (Big 4), M&A banking (MM)

Sep 2, 2012
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