Non-target resume critique! SA 2015. TY

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I am a junior going to a non-target on the east coast with a 3.5 GPA. I had a good internship in a boutique investment bank this summer, so I think that should help.
I am aiming for a BB investment banking summer internship. I know it is going to be a tough battle but I have already started networking and I am certain that I can get 1st rounds at one BB.
I would like to improve my chances of landing 1st rounds at other BB by having my resume correct.

Thanks in advance!

edit: I updated my resume with the changes you told me. Please check the grammar as English is my second language.

Thanks all!

Comments (11)

Aug 16, 2014

I will give SB to anyone giving constructive criticism! Thanks

Aug 16, 2014

Well you're approaching it the right way. I'm sure you can get first rounds, but your resume isn't going to be the big differentiating factor. Anyways, it's very good. Here goes:

-Personally, I would prefer more detail in the investment club and the CFA challenge. I would make room by eliminating the University Donations Officer caller part--it's nice that you had a job but you want the resume to scream "finance" as much as possible. This is a matter of preference, of course, but I've been told by many people in the industry that it's better to have heavy detail than it is to simply list a ton of positions.

-There seems to be some space at the bottom--consider going up a font size? not sure what it would look like/if it would fit, but it seems odd to have a good amount of space at the top/bottom and have font as small as it is. You can change margins

-I prefer, personally, full years (i.e. 2014 vs '14). It looks cleaner and more professional in my opinion

Out of time for now, but I'll try to circle back with more later.

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Aug 16, 2014

Thanks for taking the time out to look over my resume!
- I added one more line to the CFA challenge section. I am planning on completing the Advance Financial Modeling course by BIWS before classes start, so I will that in my resume.
- I increased the font size from 10pts to 10.5.

English is my second language, can look over grammar,article usage, etc?

Thanks a lot!

Aug 16, 2014

1. "International student scholarship" - Capitalize 'student' and 'scholarship'
2. Switch the order of "Intermediate Accounting" & "Financial Statement Analysis' to keep everything in alphabetical order left to right
3. You have quite a lot of white space towards the bottom, so I think you can afford to increase your font a bit. (It'd be a little easier on the eyes too!)
4. I would revise your 2nd bullet under the Non Profit organization internship to: "Managed project data, training programs, and budgets for Nonprofit organization's database"
5. The 2nd bullet under your Mining Internship - can you quantify (%) how much you expedited to the process by? Always try to quantify your results where appropriate.
6. University Donations Office - same thing as #4. Use numbers in place of words so for example: (Raised over $5,000 in financial support from alumni)
7. No need to put down the Excel or Powerpoint skills. Those should be a given
8. Interests - capitalize each individual list item!
Oh and you should check out my resume too, because when I first opened yours, our first two internship experience titles almost looked identical to me, haha.

Hope this helped!


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Aug 16, 2014

Hey TGP! Thanks for your comments.
I have updated my resume with the corrections you suggested.
I put down the Excel skill as I am good with VBA as well.

I will give you some feedback on your resume later today. Good luck on recruiting season this fall!

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Aug 24, 2014

Delete commas before "and". For example, "Capital IQ, and Bloomberg" should be "Capital IQ and Bloomberg".
In addition, under Interests you need to add "and" before volunteering/student mentoring. Lastly, in English numbers under 10 should be written out such as "Lead a team of 4",should be "Lead a team of four".

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Aug 24, 2014

Thanks UES-EU! I have updated my resume with your suggestions, please take a look back when you have some spare time.
Thanks in advance.


Aug 25, 2014

Nonprofit - second bullet sounds weird. If I'm interpreting it right, then maybe ", such as" will be a better fit in place of "like"

Bullet 3 of CFA Challenge, don't use "and then", maybe use "; moved on to present in front of a panel of CFA judges"

Investment club bullet 1 - did anything result from it?

Otherwise it looks solid. You can consider making your name bigger and bold so it looks more pronounced. Your judgment.

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Aug 25, 2014

Thanks Mr. Hansen! I think my resume is starting to look good.


Aug 25, 2014

Hello Simeo,

I will give you a few suggestions, but the very best advice as a former writer of a major newspaper is to viciously hunt for your mistakes. A good rule of thumb is to find at least 10 typos or grammatical errors after the third or final draft of any document. Since this is your resume, I would say 20 typos. We all want our documents to be prefect so there is a mental challenge of finding mistakes when it is easier to believe that the document is fine. With that said, I would edit:

1. 2nd line under Summer Analyst: delete comma after "transactions" and before "and"
2. For your Accounting Internship did you translate documents "from" Spanish to English?

Regarding Content:
1. For your investment club state the type of industry research you conducted.
2. For the mining company internship, can you quantify the cost savings?
3. What type of student mentoring did you do? If you tutored anyone, I would say so.

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Aug 25, 2014