OBLITERATE MY NONTARGET RESUME PLEASE! Accepting any comments or criticism!!

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Sep 18, 2017

Looks like any other resume.

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Sep 18, 2017

A few comments
- ubs wealth management huh?
- Analyzed and conducted market research on the basic materials sector to find opportunities within the equity
market --> why waste one whole line on the word market
- ADDITIONAL INFORMATION --> add in excel skills, bloomberg\
- seo intern manager --> no idea what u do there. manage 15-20 interns doesnt add value as well, unless you provide me with backup information
- try to say what u achieved at the end of every job description. For example --> stocks pitched managed a xx% return over a period of xx years

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Sep 19, 2017

Thank you very much @Mamypokozang! Appreciate the comments. I agree with you, I have reduced the amount of bullets from my extracurricular activities and added additional experience from a previous internship.

Do you think that my job description for the Boutique IB firm and Wealth Management sounds good? I wasn't sure if I had enough action and result from those bullet points.

Sep 19, 2017

I would think Boutique IB is good. However, for BB wealth management you could elaborate more.

* Analyzed mutual funds by calculating metrics of risk and performance to replace poor performing funds for high net worth individuals --> maybe u made use of models? how complex? any var analysis done or iterations made. and what was the result
* Member of financial advisory team that managed over $250m in assets for high net worth individuals--> so wad do you do in the advisory team? what is your value add and how does it show the recruiter taht this point value adds to building your character
* Assisted with updating client accounts and financial goal analysis through UBS software --> sounds pretty boring to me this one, unless u can say smth like scenario analysis for my clients and proposed changes to their portfolios. xx% took up my recommendatinos, and netted them a xx% upside compared to their current portfolio in a year/ rebalanced them to suit market condtions.. idk . but im pretty sure you get what i mean right?

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Sep 19, 2017

Awesome! I am working on changing all my bullet points for my work experiences besides the Boutique IB. I did pretty standard stuff at the BB wealth management so I didn't want to add too much bs because interns were limited in what they could work on. Once again, I really appreciate the reply! (:

Sep 19, 2017

No problem. All the best to your future endeavours! Hopefully WSO gives u a complimentary name change from The Intern to The Analyst or something. HAHA cheers!

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Sep 19, 2017

Thank you! I wish you the best as well. That would be awesome if WSO eventually gives me a name change after I break into the industry! (:

Sep 19, 2017

Hey man, Class of 2017 here as well. Some helped me on my resume a while ago, and he's from a T2 balance sheet shop (Think WF, SG, BNP) and he told me to elaborate on my Experience Part, and write as little as you can on the Relevant Coursework part. I found this helpful

Sep 19, 2017

Thanks for the tip! You're right. I removed the relevant coursework because it's probably self explanatory if I was a finance major. It also gives me 2 more lines to work with for my resume. How are you doing in your job search? Or are you graduating in Fall of 2017?

Sep 19, 2017

I'd actually suggest shorter descriptions.
People tend to have preconceived notions for what certain companies/positions are involved with, so writing too much seems repetitive since eyes tend to glaze over it. (Mine do)

Then again, I'm a minimalist.

Sep 19, 2017

Sounds good! I'm working on shortening the descriptions for my clubs and extracurricular activities since I think adding one more previous internship could benefit me. I'm not sure if you mean that I should shorten some of my bullets for the IB firm and BB WM to one line though...

Sep 19, 2017

Did you have a high ACT score (30+)? If so, I would consider putting it on there. I'm a non-target as well and multiple interviewers have asked me for it. One even recommended I just put it on my resume as its an 'equalizer.' Other posters have given good advice as well.

Sep 19, 2017

Unfortunately, I did not take the ACT in high school :. My SAT score was also mediocre (1700 - 1750). I do wish I had taken tests more seriously back in high school because I noticed that a lot of applications ask for my previous SAT or ACT scores. I was considering studying and trying to score very high on the GMAT just so I can boost my resume but I've heard that it is a waste of time unless I plan on going to business school right after. At the moment, I'm considering studying for the CFA level 1 while networking to make up for my poor cumulative GPA and wasn't sure if this would be the right move.

Sep 19, 2017

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