Please Review Resume - thanks

-I would use '13 instead of 2013 for everything -increase margins -line bullets up with left margin -don't list "N/A" GPA since you don't have anything anyways and it may look bad -inconsistent dashes - make sure they're all same length

Just a quick 1 min glance. you can add a lot more information to beef it up (like responsibility wise) a lot of white space, especially for the bullet points that go onto two lines - make sure those are filled to the right with info

Thanks so don't list GPA at all for my current University? I will change up some of those formatting issues, but some of my bullet points actually go to three lines because there is just no way I can make it shorter without having a terrible explanation. I will try to make them flow all to the right. Let me know of anything else, thanks

you can definitely make some line shorter - don't exceed 2 lines - not difficult :)

if it's N/A it'll draw attention and they'll probably ask about it - up to you, if u transfer to better one it may be better to leave it

Well the N/A shouldn't be a problem because I make it very apparent that I am starting my first semester at a new school this August, so I obviously wouldn't have a GPA. And thanks ill work on condensing a bit

im not sure the general consensus, but should the current internship bullets be in present tense?

also, you do realize your name is the pdf right?

Influencers: Mitt Romney. I'd leave dat out.

Also, what above user said.

jasper90:

also, you do realize your name is the pdf right?

shhh i thought he didn't notice :)

yea present internship in present tense

nice 2 meet u craig

Damnit, im an idiot.. And im uploading a new one. Let me know what you think of this format. And also, I have heard mixed reviews on the present/past tense thing for internships, even if I am doing them now. Shouldn't my resume be in one tense together, and also, this internship will be in "past tense" when it gets reviewed in a few weeks any ways considering it ends August 1st. So putting it in present tense for a couple weeks just to have to change it again doesn't really make much sense to me.

I uploaded a new one. Please let me know what you guys think of this format.

You already transferred to Fordham right? I would go in an see a career services resume reviewer. Your resume needs to be strengthened significantly. Start there and then come back.

Just curious what you think is wrong with it exactly

I cant do that until fall semester starts also

ValueAdder68:

Just curious what you think is wrong with it exactly

Quite a bit. I'm not going to sit here and re-write a resume for someone over a forum. Just get it looked at as soon as you can. You'll have time.

Tenses, actionable items, weak sub-bullets, etc., etc.,

I never asked you to re-write my resume. I am asking for feedback. Saying "go ask someone else" is not feedback, and that is basically what you are implying. But thanks I guess..

ValueAdder68:

I never asked you to re-write my resume. I am asking for feedback. Saying "go ask someone else" is not feedback, and that is basically what you are implying. But thanks I guess..

I'd agree with peinvestor...the wording in some of your bullets seems weird/off and/or too long. It's not the worst resume I've seen but you could definitely improve it.

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As mudkipz said, increase the margins. Looks stretched. For a kid your age resume looks solid, no joke.

Do you have no non-finance experience? Could add a bit of color.

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ValueAdder68:

I never asked you to re-write my resume. I am asking for feedback. Saying "go ask someone else" is not feedback, and that is basically what you are implying. But thanks I guess..

I'd agree with peinvestor...the wording in some of your bullets seems weird/off and/or too long. It's not the worst resume I've seen but you could definitely improve it.

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