Please tear a teacher's resume apart! Critique Request!

Current first year TFA member applying to some of the partner organizations for next summer. Please be brutal and honest, but helpful. Looking to focus on the BB firms, and MBB as well.

Gracias!
http://www.razume.com/documents/23091
*** EDIT ***

Took a couple of the suggestions in mind and edited it. Any other pointers?:

NEW: http://www.razume.com/documents/23208

Comments (9)

Nov 9, 2011

I want to fuck the girl in that picture

Nov 9, 2011

If you transferred to Cornell then you should list your previous school on your resume

Nov 10, 2011

people know that SATs are scored out of 800. i'd think twice about working at a place where they don't know that. also, you have to quantify every achievement that is quantifiable. misallocated resources fixed? how much?

Nov 10, 2011

Did you get a scholarship for the MSE at Penn?

Nov 10, 2011

Yea, and it's subsidized already to about $40K total. AmeriCorps covers another $10K. With the scholarships it drops to between $15-20K.

Thanks ivote, I'll be sure to take a look at that.

Nov 11, 2011

Your SATs are much too low to be teaching it. I'm shocked they'd let you administer prep when you wouldn't qualify for Kaplan/ PR. And personally I would take off ALANA, it makes it too obvious you're a URM, and that's the only reason you got into Cornell (If the poor SATs weren't already a tip off).

Nov 11, 2011

Thanks for that informative analysis. Anybody else got tips, critiques, or pointers?

Nov 13, 2011

1) Get rid of the gray shading in section headers
2) Move your SAT scores to next to your GPA. Use the extra line to space our resume. It's looking like a huge block of text, which is not good for the tired analyst who will be shuffling through the resume pile
3) You can remove "Extra-Curricular" in the line where you list your activities. Just "Activities" is fine
4) Remove the "/800"

Nov 19, 2011
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