Resume Help - Go to a target

Hey guys,

I posted this in the resume forum, but I wasn't getting any critique.

I am getting ready to apply for summer internships, and I would appreciate some feedback.

http://www.razume.com/documents/23936

Some notes:
1. First internship listed was at a MM investment bank, second was a very large (6b+) hedge fund, and last was a corp. finance gig at a very large international alcoholic beverage producer (Annual Rev > 3b). I did not list a school year internship I had last year at a small local boutique IB because it was mainly research oriented, and I didn't have much to talk about it.

  1. I go to a target school (think H/W/S). My GPA has been pretty volatile, but it bounced from a 3.54 to a 3.65 last semester (I got a 4.0 - I don't know if that helps or not)

  2. After reading some other comments from other resumes, I am probably going to remove the mention of Breaking Into Wall Street because I really don't want to be raped by technicals (even though I am studying pretty hard for them)

Let me know what you guys think. Any input would be appreciated.

 
Drummer:
After reading some other comments from other resumes, I am probably going to remove the mention of Breaking Into Wall Street because I really don't want to be raped by technicals (even though I am studying pretty hard for them)

I had it on my resume as well and never got raped by anyone as far as technicals go. One Vice President asked me about it once and thought the name was funny but that was about it. I think most people just skim your resume anyhow and don't think much about it. Plus if you really worked through it, you shouldn't have any problems with the technicals in interviews

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@Couchy I have gotten that comment on my resume a couple of times actually (You would be the second person). I know that it is typical to have the bullets go all the way to the edge, but I feel like it is much cleaner when I nest them; especially when I am detailing specific points.

Any other input on this guys? Is this a dealbreaker?

@Harvard Thanks. I know that some of my descriptions are definitely lacking. I actually shelled out the cash for a professional critique from M&I, but a couple of internship apps are due tonight so I am just trying to put out the best product I can until I get back the M&I revisions. Nice catch on the extra space!

 

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