Three Months of Work...
[Newest version attached. Please fire away. Thank you guys!]
After a few rounds of revision (advices from BB/PE analysts/associates/VP's), this is what came out...
I'm graduating from a non-target this December, and I'm trying to break back into IB during off-cycle recruiting (I worked as SA in a BB IBD last summer). So far I haven't heard back from any bank that I applied to so I am a bit worried that something was terribly wrong with my resume. Also I've sent my resume to pretty much every contact of mine in the industry, but all they suggested were minor formatting/wording issues which does not really change the big picture. So here I am confused and wondering if I'm going to get anything out of the recruiting season. Please help!
Any opinions are much appreciated!
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THAT'S WHAT'S UP! Nice resume. I'm not sure of the magnitude of your piano award, but do you have any recent awards? 2005 seems so long ago.
I wanted to add some elements of art/music to my background but I guess that's not important.. Thanks for the input!
You need way more detail on what you did during your banking internship. Probably the IM role as well. Your headers are too large and margins too big. I rarely tell anyone this, but make your bullets longer (add detail). Avoid passive verbs like "attended".
Might want to add section breaks between Education, WE, Leadership, etc.
"Work Experience" instead of "Working Experiences"
Get rid of "Candidate of..." in your degree. That's implied by future graduation date. Not a fan of how you did the two columns under education. You can combine your major and minor on one line. Bullets would keep it consistent.
"In the clean and alternative energy sector" or "In the clean and alternative energy sectors" "In the clean energy and healthcare industries"
The first bullet in the IM internship is really weak. I have no idea what research you did or what your presentation to the PMs was. The second bullet doesn't make sense grammatically (researches?)
"Led weekly group" instead of "Led the weekly group"
This honestly needs a lot of work, and I don't have time to go through everything. You need a native English speaker to go through this in detail and help you with the grammar.You also seem to be seriously selling your summer internship short simply by the lack of content surrounding it.
Updated version attached (after comments from WSO and contacts in the industry)! Please rip it apart. Thanks!
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GOOD cv
excellent
great
hope you get it
sorry i have to get enough banna points to use this website fully
but your CV looks pretty good
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