Resume Critique please - Breakdown my resume
Would appreciate it if someone could breakdown my resume and inform me about any glaring issues/mistakes.
| Attachment | Size |
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| wso resume.pdf 114.03 KB | 114.03 KB |
| wso resume - revised.pdf 218.33 KB | 218.33 KB |
| Resume - wso - revised 2.pdf 220.89 KB | 220.89 KB |
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first off, you have a ton of space. seriously, your margins are huge. also, your work experience amounts to about 1/3 of a page and your supporting bullet points are extremely general. the work experience is the whole point of your resume, it's your time to show off what you've done. surely you have more to say than just "assisted in the analysis of funding new private hospitals..." how did you assist? what skills did you exhibit? did you take initiative? if so, what did you do? also, as a personal preference, i wouldn't restate the company name twice, i'd delete the space and the second company name, but leave the change in title and the dates. finally, i'd take your dean's list bit and put that up with your grades, then cut the awards section completely - the awards are from 2007 and they're not relevant to finance/banking. you could put it down at the bottom if you really want to keep it, if you have nothing better to say. i'd also get rid of the campus band thing, unless you really think it's crucial to let your future boss know that you won battle of the bands in college.
Hey thanks for the feedback, I'll work on that stuff.
Referring to the last sentence, the reason I included it there was because I see all these job descriptions that keep saying they're looking for leadership qualities. I never really had an opportunity to demonstrate that in my work experience as an intern, so I thought it relevant to include my experience in a band.
Given that context, do you still think it's a good idea to take it off or maybe there is a better way to describe it or something.
I wouldn't put that in a section called "Leadership." Maybe "Interests" or something like that.
This is probably the worst formatting I've ever seen. No offence, but you have SO MUCH SPACE!!! Jeez! And write more about your roles! Show tangible results!!!
Work on the formatting, a lot.
Pretty weak. Start with sorting the formatting, then improve content. You need to get more relevant experience.
1) Use M&I format
2) Put 'other certifications' & 'awards & achievement' & 'software experience' into new 'skills, activities & interests' section.
3) Lump 'work' and 'leadership' sections into one.
4) Move all dates over to r/h side
5) Use arial/TNR font
6) More detail of what you did and what these actions achieved under work experiences
7) Get a more relevant and detailed leadership experience.
Thanks everyone for the suggestions. I re-did my resume incorporating them. Please refer to the file in my first post labelled "wso resume - revised.pdf"
Much better. Few minor things I'd change:
1) Move 'honours' parts from 'education' to 'achievements'
2) Keep interests to one word (eg. basketball, music) - this will be expanded upon at interview
3) Be more specific for what your actions in your work experience actually achieved.
Thanks Mutt. Just a couple questions:
1) I thought it would be more appropriate to have the honors right under the school and degree rather than have the reader look for them all the way in the bottom
3) By this, do you mean quantifying my results or something along those lines? All I can really say is that some of the loan applications were approved because of my work and that we were closer to the development target.
1) I think it's better at the bottom.
3) Yes.
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