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anyone? trying to land a decent internship for the fall semester and build off that.
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I would take out the Community College Listing. Once you start at a 4 year (at least a semester in), then no further reference made to community college on resume (Went to CC before 4 year and learned this through recruiting).
For the Investment Management Position, the first line item points out what you are doing, but does not mention the impact this has on firm and you, so edit that bullet point.
For Fine Watches role. the first bullet point seems odd. I would take it out unless you can reword to make it seem more impactful. I would reword the first part of second bullet (Consistently met sales goals) to make it flow a lot better into other part of the bullet point. Remove the last bullet point (Think about it this way: Isn't that given for each role you could put on your resume).
For Assistant Manager role, the first bullet point is too general. What did you accomplish in monitoring these employees ("Action that lead to a result" is the thinking).
Take out Microsoft Office as a skill (It is assumed that you have this skill).
The presentation is fine (although I would try to balance the bullet points listed for positions, but emphasizing finance experience and moving attention away from earlier non finance roles). What roles are looking to go into and from there, I would say search similar resumes from people in those fields.
Appreciate the advice, thank you.
I also did a case comp at school that lasted about a month where we pitched something to various bankers from different firms. Should I leverage that into some work experience?
That can be listed as work experience (especially when building resume with not a lot of experience).
updated resume. anyone else wanna take a shot and destroy this thing?
Typo - "Won 1st t place", I recommend just saying "first" Style - I feel like capslocking the headlines under experience like the banking competition would make the resume feel less organized, though it's hard to know with them blacked out Grammar - "in accordance to" is misused here, should be "in accordance with" Grammar - "monitored employees performance" should be either "monitored employee performance" or "monitored employees' performance" (the first one is better, in my opinion)
"Authenticity of materials" is kind of a funny phrase. Not sure what you mean by this. Perhaps they were professionally bound? I suspect you mean that your pitchbook was more rigorous and convincing than the others. Definitely worth mentioning, find a way to do it that is clear and gets you proper credit.
I feel like your Macy's watch experience is really vague and unproductive. Surely there is a way to incorporate skills more meaningful than cleaning watches. Look to the experience directly below, it is infinitely better presented.
Under activities - I find "community service" carries a subtle connotation of being court-mandated, and find "volunteer" to be a better word for this.
You have some decent things going for you considering you're still two years out. Good luck!
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