Resume review - going into senior year
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on 6/26/09 at 12:14am
Hi Guys
I am going into my senior year and am in the process of preparing for this fall's FT IBD recruiting, looking to get some critique on my resume. I am interning in the business development division of a pharmaceutical company right now and will include that experience at the end of summer and will take out the 'portfolio manager's intern' section at that point.
Below is the link, I am not sure why part of my resume comes up on page 2. In my word document the resume fits on one page.
http://www.razume.com/documents/10516
Thanks for the help!





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Your name should be bigger and if you are going to keep your address, email, # on one line, then put bullet points in each break.
For work experience, you want the names of the company to pop first, rather than your position. Instead of bolding your position, which allows the company to fade into the background, bold the company name, then next line, put your position and location. Use action verbs (edited, carried out, assisted - not great verbs - they don't grab attention), and focus on results and brief sentences, rather than paragraphs detailing each task. Think broader and more result oriented - think "what was this used for" instead of "what did I do step by step".
For leadership, if every descriptive bullet starts with a verb everywhere else, every bullet should start with a verb. What did you actually do as the President? Make any decisions, manage any events or processes? Be the face for anything? Attending events doesn't sound good, networking doesn't sound good - of course you did these things as a club member, but if you are going to put down President, then tell me something about it - show me what you've done in that position. For VP External, punch up those bullet points - it seems like you did things there, so punch up the words and descriptions, as it stands now, it sounds flat and dull.
If you're going to throw a skills like in there, I would probably lump the group with hobbies, and throw a line of hobbies in there just to spice it up a bit since you've got the section already anyway.
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Thanks for your suggestions
Thanks for your suggestions BankonBanking. I made some changes to the formatting and took out networked/attended etc. I do have an 'Interests' section at the bottom but it shows up on page 2 of the uploaded resume for some reason. Still in the process of making my work experience sound more result oriented...
anyone have any other comments. something that just puts you off? the weakest part of the resume?