CV and Cover letter feedback please

Please be brutal - but do point out the odd positive. I know opinions are each to their own but if there's a trend I will listen. I'm not great at presenting myself.

http://www.razume.com/documents/16823

http://www.razume.com/documents/16824

Thanks very much in advance,

Regards
T

 
Best Response

CV: -formatting is shit, look at mergersandinquisition.com for a better template, theres a lot of space wasted and it looks overall messy -Misc. should not be the biggest section of your CV, a lot of the stuff in that section can be pulled out and put into more detail. Ie your own business, got into more detail, put some figures into it. How did you streamline etc. You have to build on it. -Take out the brief descpr. -Why is your DOB London? and dont but your DOB on your CV anyway, and take it off your cover letter as well.

The good thing is you have some potentially good content, but you need to make it look good in terms of describing what you did. Your employment section is like 4 bullets, whereas it needs to be expanded on what you actually did.

For example take a couple things: ie own business, big 4, ski instructor and expand on those in much more detail. Then at the bottom list the other things.

The template on M&I will help you loads organizing it.

Cover Letter: -Put a lot of the stuff you have on your cover letter into your CV, especially the first couple paragraphs -I would stick away from the video games, despite the fact you think it transfers, it brings up flags (altho some desks I can think of would love it, its a long shot and much more likely to hurt you) -Make the cover letter a lot shorter, ie 3/4 of a page, and make it sound a bit more generic. Hardly anyone reads cover letters and your CV needs to make the pitch for you.

 

Might want to describe what Affiliate Lotteries is, revenue, etc.

If I had asked people what they wanted, they would have said faster horses - Henry Ford
 

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