Destroy my resume - Make me cry
Absolutely obliterate my resume. If you see even the tiniest little thing, just rip into it. Don't hold anything back & let me have it.
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-If you're non-target universities are the same, I wouldn't list the College of Business and the College separately. That's somewhat unusual. It also makes me wonder what your total cumulative is. Take off pre-calc I and II regardless, in my opinion. I wouldn't include math below calc. It's definitely not going to impress anyone, and worst case they may think you're actively mediocre at math.
-The main portion has problems I generally associate with this template: it feels like a wall of text. I wouldn't want to read through everything. You have to think: if some guy just came off 100 hours and this is his utter last priority, can he get a sense of what you did in 15 seconds? 5 of those will be spent on interests, GPA, school, scores, and just a quick glance at formatting. I'd want to make sure the highlights of a venture accelerator internship really popped. You can achieve this by using sub-bullets. Read M&I's resume tips (even though I like the WSO template a little better it's easier to misuse).
-I hate travel as an interest unless you actually travel a ton. Like an amount that would surprise me. That's a pet peeve of mine, though, and not representative of everyone. Soccer, tennis, skiing, pretty standard, just make sure you have stories or whatever.
-Be careful of being fluent in Dutch. It's a slightly unusual language so it probably won't happen but they may ask you to be "financially fluent" which is much harder
-Would be a slightl red flag to me that your only leadership is from 2012--before you started college. By now, you should no longer be listing stuff from before september 2012, when you started. Join some student orgs asap because now that I'm looking, you're really light on those.
There are a few other things that don't bother me personally but could/would bother others: -Why are you listing your lifeguard certifications? -Why are you telling me you read a book? -Everyone is proficient in excel and word, get rid of it. While this doesn't bother me personally this is much more universal than the previous two recommendations
Overall, the resume is fine, but it won't wow anyone. There are a couple red flags and deficiencies you need to address, especially going into your summer internship season.
Wow! Thank you for the feedback. You've made some really good points and I'll be sure to address them.
The universities are different. I transferred from one to the other. I'll take off pre-calc though (good call).
In general, I really dislike sub-bullets in a resume. I could include more experiences but they're not really finance related, as I switched from bio/pre-med to finance after I transferred schools. Not sure what to do about that one. I'll definitely look at using sub-bullets from the M&I site.
Haha I definitely haven't traveled anywhere amazing. I've just lived in Europe where we traveled a lot, and I went backpacking last summer. But I guess it's not really relevant to banking so I'll leave that out.
I'm listing lifeguard certifications because I don't have any others! Haha. I'll take them out. For the book, it's the only thing I've actually completed so far that relates to modelling. I'm working on the Macabus self-study courses, so when I finish that I'll replace it. I'll definitely get rid of the proficiency in excel and word. I wish I had access to Bloomberg and/or Capital IQ so I could list that.
Thanks again for the feedback. I'll make these changes and then post a new version.
Thanks for taking feedback well. You're resume is fine and does what a resume is supposed to do--my comments are relatively nitpicky but unfortunately can be important for some.
For starters, it looks a lot more balance/better in general. I like seeing two things under Leadership, visually. Again, I know it can't happen immediately but I will stress it again: joining some student orgz would likely help. Investment clubs, etc. would look nice on the resume, and would be a great replacement for the YMCA.
-Macabacus is tough. Congrats on getting through it all. -I know you don't love sub-bullets but once you get to six lines it feels necessary. However, if you don't have discrete projects to work on, then don't do sub-bullets in my opinion. This is also fairly subjective I don't think anyone would slam you for not having them -The semi-colon between Administration and Finance major is weird. I'd make it a comma....EDIT: Actually it turns out I'm an idiot--even I have a semi-colon. This is opinion driven -It's fine for now, but eventually you're going to get to the point where you're running out of room. When you do, make sure that you're secondary lines under your first collegiate institution are the first to go
I think you're in pretty decent shape, resume wise. Keep gathering experiences, etc.
I hear ya about the student orgs. I've thought a lot about joining the finance one here, but from what I can see they really don't do much. Literally just pizza parties and fundraising. I'm not sure how helpful that experience is.. The people from my school that have made it into IB haven't been a part of student clubs, and most of the people in the student clubs are more interested in accounting and insurance/real estate finance.
The six lines is honestly just to fill up space. As I add more work experience I will cut it down to 4-5 lines, and with added leadership I will sub out YMCA, then State Department of Health
I think even if your Finance club doesn't really do much, it may still add some substance to the CV (give more of that 'quick glance' appeal that @MJK was referring to). You may want to have a solid response prepared if you get asked about those experiences though lol. MJK what is your opinion on personal trading/investing accounts and how they should be presented on a CV?
It depends but generally just at the bottom as a line item. Include returns. Be able to describe an investment strategy as well. I'm not too sure though since I don't maintain one. I'm going off what I've seen and heard.
I think at one point you put VCs as in the plural- so that wouldn't need an apostrophe- just being picky though!
Hm.. why would it not need the plural? It would be Venture Capitalists, plural, which would shorten to VC's. I might be wrong though! Haha I do appreciate the eye of scrutiny here
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