Just updated my resume, need some feedback!

Following some suggestions from my previous attempt at uploading my resume for review, I reformatted according to the M&I Banking Resume Template. I think since the credit deals are a bit limited in comparison to IB deals it is difficult to use the format. However I do understand the benefit especially if I am trying to apply and interview for Investment Management/Hedge Fund jobs. Let me know what you think. Need some feedback since this is a first draft in the new format. Thanks in advance!

Previous thread: http://www.wallstreetoasis.com/forums/corporate-banking-resume-review-j…

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  1. "used in transaction" you forgot the word "in"

  2. "Transaction resulted in enhanced liquidity" seems like there is a double space at the beginning of the sentence.

  3. Add "Interests" or "Hobbies" to the bottom section of your resume

  4. "Credit facility to nearly $900MM modified capital structure to allow for growth and acquisitions" I feel like you're missing a period or a comma after "$900MM

  5. The grammar on a lot of your sentences seem off or wrong, I would have someone proofread your resume. Also, try to make your resume more concise if possible.

 

Thanks for the feedback. Considering this was my first draft in a new format, I am mostly interested to see if this works better than the last format I used.

 

Just uploaded with some changes made. I am skeptical of this format because I don't feel like there is enough room to convey all the responsibilities etc. of my position. I understand it is "deal-centric" for a reason but that takes up most of the room.

Also, does anyone have any thoughts of me including a line item about personal investing experience?

 

Personal investing - it's already under "Interests"; that's all you need. And speaking of that section:

"Interests: Personal investing, Avid golfer, Classic film enthusiast"

English 101. When in a list, make all items parallel in grammatical structure. So you would want this instead:

"Interests: Personal investing, golf, classic films" (no need to capitalize either)

.... unless you really are interested in avid golfers and classic film enthusiasts. I don't judge.

Bold your company names for easier reading.

Currently: future neurologist, current psychotherapist Previously: investor relations (top consulting firm), M&A consulting (Big 4), M&A banking (MM)
 

Bullet points need to be much more 1) results-oriented, 2) quantifiable, and 3) applicable to the "working world". For example, as a strength/conditioning coach, where you responsible for any sort of recruitment/business development? Did you run any analyses on your workout programs to test their effectiveness? etc.


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