Why is my resume not working? Please annihilate my resume

chicandtoughness --- curious --- is your assertion that a resume should be 1 page, or more than 2? There are many different schools of thought on this - I find it very difficult to optimally portray the capabilities & experiences of highly qualified individuals in less than 2 pages!

-Brian http://www.bburkeconsulting.com

Good Lord this resume is bad. I mean, it's awful. One of the worst I've seen in form and function (not in content).

• 1 page, for God's sake. You aren't as qualified as you think you are. I have 8 years of relevant work experience and my resume is 1 and a quarter pages; 1 page if I'm really, really good.
• You have grammar errors EVERYWHERE. Your most relevant work experience, for example, says "Corporate Accounting Assistant,"… That's a comma you have there. Geesh. Your very last sentence of your resume, for example, starts with a lower case letter.
• You label your finance major. No need to list relevant coursework.
• You have hardly been at any job for more than 10 minutes. Remove the Home Depot, Vault Security, and referee jobs. Increase your Serving Communities job description with action items and/or accomplishments. I'm stunned at how little is put there.
• Anything from high school should be eliminated.
• Red Cross camp experience needs to go.
• Get rid of your sentence that begins with "Toastmasters". Frankly, I'd probably only keep the actual hard skills (first line). Those are really nice skills and they are buried in a sea of writing.
• What the crap is NGLC and APIRG? I'd definitely remove at least APIRG. If you keep NGLC then at least use the organization's name. IF you keep it. I'd also lean toward removing BYOKOB volunteer experience. Web designer and student rep are good ones. I think the rest need to go.

In sum, keep 1) Serving Communities; 2) First City Financial; 3) Save-a-Village; 4) Province Government. All else MUST go. Create a skills section for just your hard skills. The other 2 lines--gone. Eliminate relevant coursework section. Edit the resume for grammar, spelling, consistency. Get resume to 1 page (here's a free tip--increase margins to get to 1 page if you are struggling).

If you do those things, you have a very, very solid resume. As it stands, this may be the worst resume I've ever seen and if I were a hiring manager receiving this I would feel angry that you wasted 15 seconds of my life.

This must be a joke. Perhaps you forgot to print out the second page each time you gave it to someone?

MaxWindsliver -- I have seen numerous resumes, and yours is not as bad as some of the above comments may have you believe (relative to many others). You're not at the top of the pile, but I've seen many worse. DC Depository makes some good suggestions that I would agree with.

Re: I'd probably only keep the actual hard skills (first line). Those are really nice skills and they are buried in a sea of writing. This is a GREAT point. Don't make people look for what you're good at. You put it right in front of their face.

Macaroniman has a point, though made in a little bit of a crude fashion. Your second page can be really condensed into a few lines.
There are many jobs here that aren't "value added" You may want to consider removing Home Depot all together (you won't show a gap because of your internship). You can remove referee, student group, APIRG, Red Cross, & High School. You may want to find a generic title and group them into something like: Additional Experience Then just bullet some of the experiences (if you're too attached to get rid of them).

But given your level of experience, you could have it down to one solid page, and it would serve you much better.

-BB http://www.bburkeconsulting.com

^Agreed, cut the font size down 1-2 pt, cut out 1/3 of your entries, make at least 2 bullet points for the ones you do have, and then please repost it. It is difficult to make suggestions until we have something closer to the final product to critique.

This guy has also not been on WSO for 4 months, so you guys are shouting into the open air here.