Why is my resume not working? Please annihilate my resume
Something about this resume isn't working. Could you please slap some sense into it?
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Big error: It's a two-page resume. That's what's not working.
Other things: - Remove everything from before college. What you did in high school is pretty irrelevant at this stage. Things like being a soccer referee do not need to be in your work experiences. Put soccer in your interests if you really think it's important. - Lots of spelling and other attention-to-detail errors. You spell it "co-ordinated" in one bullet point and then "coordinated" in the following one. Consistency is key. - Any job that has only one bullet point is either a) not important, or b) not being explained enough - Needs more results-driven language and less "HR description of job responsibilities" style writing - Explain your acronyms. What's an NGLC? or a APIRG? People reading your resume may not have the slightest clue. - Skills, Activities, Interests section needs some organization. What is your second bullet... activities? or awards? - Lots of orphaned words (see: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Widows_and_orphans). So anything that is one word on a line by itself? Remove it. Either shorten your description or write more to fill up the space. It's grating on the eyes. Example would be the word "experience" under Home Depot or "Business" in your relevant coursework.
chicandtoughness --- curious --- is your assertion that a resume should be 1 page, or more than 2? There are many different schools of thought on this - I find it very difficult to optimally portray the capabilities & experiences of highly qualified individuals in less than 2 pages!
-Brian http://www.bburkeconsulting.com
Resume should be one page
Good Lord this resume is bad. I mean, it's awful. One of the worst I've seen in form and function (not in content).
In sum, keep 1) Serving Communities; 2) First City Financial; 3) Save-a-Village; 4) Province Government. All else MUST go. Create a skills section for just your hard skills. The other 2 lines--gone. Eliminate relevant coursework section. Edit the resume for grammar, spelling, consistency. Get resume to 1 page (here's a free tip--increase margins to get to 1 page if you are struggling).
If you do those things, you have a very, very solid resume. As it stands, this may be the worst resume I've ever seen and if I were a hiring manager receiving this I would feel angry that you wasted 15 seconds of my life.
This must be a joke. Perhaps you forgot to print out the second page each time you gave it to someone?
MaxWindsliver -- I have seen numerous resumes, and yours is not as bad as some of the above comments may have you believe (relative to many others). You're not at the top of the pile, but I've seen many worse. DC Depository makes some good suggestions that I would agree with.
Re: I'd probably only keep the actual hard skills (first line). Those are really nice skills and they are buried in a sea of writing. This is a GREAT point. Don't make people look for what you're good at. You put it right in front of their face.
Macaroniman has a point, though made in a little bit of a crude fashion. Your second page can be really condensed into a few lines.
There are many jobs here that aren't "value added" You may want to consider removing Home Depot all together (you won't show a gap because of your internship). You can remove referee, student group, APIRG, Red Cross, & High School. You may want to find a generic title and group them into something like: Additional Experience Then just bullet some of the experiences (if you're too attached to get rid of them).
But given your level of experience, you could have it down to one solid page, and it would serve you much better.
-BB http://www.bburkeconsulting.com
^Agreed, cut the font size down 1-2 pt, cut out 1/3 of your entries, make at least 2 bullet points for the ones you do have, and then please repost it. It is difficult to make suggestions until we have something closer to the final product to critique.
This guy has also not been on WSO for 4 months, so you guys are shouting into the open air here.
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