Please Comment on my IB resume!!

Maybe bold both uni's you've attended(ing) just for consistency, but I see why you wouldn't bold the one you transferred from. Pretty impressive though! Quite a lot for just 2 years of college, best of luck.

I agree with droking7. It is clear that you have drive. Good luck!

Thanks guys, I appreciate it. Funny cause most people that review my resume have said the same thing about one school not being bolded. I guess I will just bold both of them to keep it consistent. I think its pretty obvious I am a transfer student

couchy:

Not bad but I only read it because I love healthcare and saw the word healthcare on your CV.

The problem is you need your formatting and content to work together- you've followed the traditional templates well but unfortunately the traditional templates pretty much suck because they attempt a 1-size-fits-all solution to CVs.

an analyst covering energy or lev-fin would be very uninterested in your CV because you don't direct the readers attention at all. Yes you want to brag and get every detail in, but most of us are too lazy to read each bullet to the end. You need to seduce the reader into giving you the benefit of the doubt. You need to give him something fresh or exciting so you'll stand out to him. You need a hook. every word should hard sell your candidacy.

It reads like a little kid rambling on about their achievements. Cute. But at least you wrote everything down. Now you need to focus the message. Find your strongest selling points and make EVERYTHING direct attention to them! You can't afford a reader to read the weaker points first.

Consistency will help you, cleverly using bolds and italics will help as well. remember people read left to right, top to bottom. Use catch phrases and name drop without looking desperate.

Words of wisdom, but I'm not exactly sure how you're supposed to implement catch phrases and namedrop.

Fordham is not a semi-target, stop kidding yourself.

If you're going to post your resume every week all summer, maybe you should consider just paying for the review service.

TechBanker82:

Fordham is not a semi-target, stop kidding yourself.

If you're going to post your resume every week all summer, maybe you should consider just paying for the review service.

I just interned for 12 weeks doing 75 hours a week completely unpaid, while living in NYC. I am making no money, and I am trying my best to make it next year so Financial restraints aren't a problem... I cant afford the resume review service right now, blow me.

Thank you everyone else. Couchy, your advice is solid and I will try my best with doing some of those things mentioned

In your interests all of your activities list what you are (e.g. "Guitar player"), and then for the last one it lists what you do ("Skiing").

While this might not be that important content-wise, it's an inconsistency that sticks out and might show "a lack of attention to detail". Other stuff looks good.