Applying for Trading - Summer Intern 2011
Hey there, kinda new here, please give me as much pointers as you can for my CV, i don't mind if its harsh as long as you think it can help me.
I'm also from the UK so bear in mind some stuff in my CV will be different to your usual formats.
As for the content of my CV I still have another internship to include but its engineering related (my degree is mech eng) but I'm not really sure if I should put it down, since it might make me seem indecisive regarding my career. That internship is well respected, but only locally in Hong Kong and I doubt if any BB firms will know much about it. (I wanna apply for London)
In my opinion for my job descriptions I think i have over glorified them, and its starting to sound BS when I read it to myself, please comment on that as I am thinking of reducing each part by 1 or 2 bullet points and adding my new engineering intern into it.
I'm going to spread my net as much as I can and apply to anything I can think off, but hopefully I would want an internship rotating desks in S&T at a BB.
http://www.razume.com/documents/16288
Cheers
"keen in water sports" smells kinda fishy
my (failed?) attempt to seem more well-rounded...
Pun intended, balbasur? ;)
apart from the well placed pun, any thoughts on my cv?
Some typos
"Coordinated a team of 8 to manage AND society..." should be "a society"
"...resulting in a rise of nearly 20% participation rates" should be "resulting in a rise in participation rates of nearly 20%"
And I would rework the football bullet (make sure you don't use any personal pronouns-you do a good job avoiding and I's or mine, so take out the we/ours).
Those are a few things that jumped out me, I would have a friend who speaks English at a first language look over it more closely.
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