Resume Review for Rising Sophomore looking for BB Opportunity

Hey guys,

I just completed my first draft of my resume and wanted to hear some feedback so I know what direction to take it in. For example, the objective statement is still extremely rough. Anyways, it would be great if you could take a look and give me any advice possible and I promise I won't get offended.

For background, I go to a target and am looking at summer opportunities at BB's in North America and Asia next summer.

http://www.razume.com/documents/16154

PS - I attended a basic 2 day DCF valuation class but much of it was following the instructor and I'm not confident that I would be able to recreate his steps or much less create a DCF from scratch myself. Having said that, I understand the basic concepts of a DCF. I didn't include this on my resume because I admit I'm far from being an expert on DCF's now but should I include this on my resume jsut to show initiative and some background? If so, how should I word it to make it sound more modest and not that I am claiming to know everything there is to know about DCF's?

Thanks again guys!

 

at my school, an A+ is actually a 4.3 so its out of 4.3 but thanks for the advice OGBanker, I'll make sure to delete the objective. Any other advice would be appreciated!

 

[quote=daniel2042]Here's my updated resume! please comment!

http://www.razume.com/documents/16183[/quote]

-I would reformat this entire resume.

-Remove SAT Subject scores. The only high school number that sticks with you is your SAT score (unless you went somewhere like Exeter).

-State what kind of Bachelor degree you are pursuing (Art, Science, Business Administration).

-I would remove Best Buy. If you decide to keep it, go into more details about your sales performance. Post numbers about how much you sold ("sold approximately $300,000 in inventory") or state your ranking in relation to the store's other salespeople ("Ranked as one of the top 5 salespeople out of sales staff of 50+ for seven out of my eight months of employment").

-Change "Beginner's Spanish (spoken and written)" to: "Spanish (elementary spoken and written)"

-Beef up ALL of your Finance, Leadership, and Employment Experience points. Your resume screams quantity, but is mute on quality.

"If you can count your money, you don't have a billion dollars." - J. Paul Getty
 
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daniel2042:

PS - I attended a basic 2 day DCF valuation class but much of it was following the instructor and I'm not confident that I would be able to recreate his steps or much less create a DCF from scratch myself. Having said that, I understand the basic concepts of a DCF. I didn't include this on my resume because I admit I'm far from being an expert on DCF's now but should I include this on my resume jsut to show initiative and some background? If so, how should I word it to make it sound more modest and not that I am claiming to know everything there is to know about DCF's?

Include it.

Just say something like: "Attended [event name] instructional seminar for DCF Valuation training."

"If you can count your money, you don't have a billion dollars." - J. Paul Getty
 

Thanks for the feedback guys!

Why do you think I shouldn't include SAT II though; by that I mean even if some people will disregard it, will others really look down on the fact that it's on my resume? I tried to include it only because I haven't taken very quantitative classes since coming to college.

Also, what exactly did you mean by beef up? I really appreciate the feedback but could you give me an example?

Thanks again.

 

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