I have been applying to a number of positions and have not been having success getting many responses (of any kind) at all. I'm starting to wonder if my resume sucks. Maybe there's something I'm not noticing that is throwing up red flags. Definitely open to having it ripped apart so please dig in and let me know what you think.
Tried changing any personal info so please excuse that, but otherwise this is what i've been working with.
Thanks in advance to anyone taking the time to help me out. Really appreciate it.
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For the financial company:
"manage the evaluation and monitoring of property" => "Evaluate and monitor property" The second bullet point is kind of vague. If it is your general job description, move it up one BP. Otherwise, elaborate. The third bullet point should have numbers. How many credit reviews? What are your results? How many risks have you found? Also, for a rule of thumb, if you have a second line, it should be half accross of the page. If it is one line, it should reach the dates.
For education, don't have the bullet points so far in. Have them the same as the other bullets.
Fix the date for your university. Here's a formatting trick:
Finally, and maybe this is just a personal taste thing, but I like the November 2010 - present format better than 10/2010-present.
One page only, please
Its supposed to be one page only. I think the formatting issues you guys have commented on so far was due to me tinkering with taking out the personal info. I appreciate the other comments and will definitely incorporate them, thank you guys.
Ditch those periods
I think you have some good experience but formatting and wording needs improvement. Your formatting is what is getting you dinged immediately
What do you mean specifically by the formatting? As I mentioned in my comment above, some of the minor format issues were due to me editing personal info out. But generally the layout of the resume is flawed? Just want to understand so I can make the necessary changes. I really appreciate your feedback
-Overall the formatting does not look "clean" because there is a lot of text and no dividers between the sections. Check out the mergers and inquisitions template and I also really like this websites template as well (http://www.lifeclever.com/give-your-resume-a-face-lift/). I agree with LHDan about the dates but I use "Nov 2010 - Present"
-The bullet points for you Education are too far indented and there should be bolded headings that describe categorize the things you are listing (example "Activities: ......" and "Honors:...."). Also do not use acronyms for the organization you were involved in.
-For you certificates list the courses under a "Coursework:..... or Relevant Coursework:......" instead of just listing the topics you covered in a sentence. It just looks more formal and polished that way. Was there a GPA for these certificate courses to demonstrate that you excelled in them? Any GPAs for your education?
Accrual, thanks for all that feedback. That website was also really helpful, I'll make sure to reformat it in a much cleaner fashion. Other than the education details, i assume by the lack of comments on the work experience that those sections are fine?
I do have a GPA for those cert courses (and I did well in them). My dilemma is whether to list them or not because my GPA in undergrad was not good. Not quite sure how best to handle that
Maybe you can just put something that signifies that you had strong grades without putting the number on it...was it awarded with "distinction" or some similar honorary type crap?
As far as content goes, it all depends on what type of position you are pursuing because that will dictate how you want to spin your experiences. There are some weak verbs mixed in there that you should replace such as "Maintained" and "Administer".
Make the bullet points more action/results oriented such as "Updated and modernized internal claims processing of $100M+ in monthly claims to improve efficiency" to " Reengineered internal claims process to improve efficiency, resulted in $100M+ claims per month"
There wasn't any distinction or honorary title with the certificates. I'd like to be able to put the GPAs of the cert programs because they were great but it will look weird if i leave out my undergrad GPA which was terrible. Interestingly, the university where I got the certificates and high GPA is a much better school than where i underperformed.
Thanks for the point about the weak verbs and making it more action/results oriented.
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