Hi Guys,
I am looking for an internship opportunity in the private equity sector. I come from an Engineering background but currently doing a master in Finance. Should I customize my cover letter better? Please criticize freely :)
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This look pretty good. If you can add bullet points; people are more likely to read those.
Strong.
Good cover letter, would recommend summarizing again your key skills and why you;re a good hire at the end of the letter.
Help need for my cover letter for Private Equity Internship (Originally Posted: 06/12/2013)
Hey guys, I just finished my cover letter for a summer internship in private equity. Tell me your opinions. I have attached it. Thanks a lot.
Way too long...be more concise
You sound clichéd as shit. It's a wall of text...
Please find a professional to work on this with you.
It reads poorly, has grammatical mistakes, and most of all what the above user said: sounds cliched as shit.
Your childhood dream was to be a finance specialist? I wanted to be an astronaut or firefighter.
far too long
Run on sentence, run on sentence, two commas and bad spacing, run on sentence.
thanks guys, i realized that it is too long and shitty. I will rewrite from the beginning but the problem is that i am an engineer and now doing a master in Finance with no previous experience in it so i don't know how to express my financial skills. Can I write the skills i acquired from the practical experience of engineering?
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