Please review my resume, I'm desperate
Here's my resume:
http://www.scribd.com/doc/6678855/Resume-an-On
note:In distinctions, I was offered the Loran, and Arbor awards, but declined them to go to the ivy.
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A few pointers. These are just my own thoughts of course. Hope others will comment and agree/disagree:
One page. No matter what, one page.
It would help if you kept all the formatting. You can still make the resume anonymous, but it is important that we see a. the formatting and b. the content as you would deliver it to a resume drop, etc. That includes locations and dates (you can genericize them, but keep all formatting)
Arial looks like a boring font here. And keep to uniformity. If some of your bullets have periods, all of them should. Or keep them off. But don't pick and choose, it looks messy.
Varsity college football? If so, great, maybe even put up some stats. Always strikes up a conversation. High school football? Still sweet, but may want to keep that off in favor of more relative material.
What positions are you interviewing for? For instance, it might be helpful and beneficial for you to list the programs you know (C, Matlab, etc.) if you were applying to sales and trading. But for banking, not as much. Also I find the list awkward. Condense it to one bullet point ("proficient in Matlab, C++, hacking into the government, etc.")
Interests are always touchy. You should remove them all together if it means keeping your resume at one page...don't they teach you this stuff at an Ivy League?! (just kidding...but serious a little bit). Instead of a shopping list, choose a few that are most meaningful to you. imo, having ten hobbies is not as impressive as having one you can really speak passionately about. Don't mention Dean's List twice.
The meat: you've got great experience, but you don't show it off well at all. There's any number of places you can go for ideas on how to hone this in (Vault, Wetfeet, M&I, previous resume submissions, etc.). Tell me the size of the deals you worked on, give me some numbers. Tell me the size of the hedge fund, tell me the exact specs of the techniques you developed, give me more numbers, and more importantly, more results. Did the pitchbook you worked on result in a closing of the deal? Did your models you built at the hedge fund result in .000000000001 alpha? Tell me what you did, how you did it, and show me the results. Resulted in, resulted in, resulted in. Numbers and results should extend beyond just your work experience. Tell me what kind of returns your frat endowment has had under your advisement. Tell me how often you write a column. Once a week, month, year? I have no way to tell unless you tell me! Also, lose the first person under interests.
Some scattered thoughts. Hope others will chime in as well. Your GPA, great experiences, and leadership roles are all powerful selling points, but they're only going to get your foot in the door if you market them well.
all those comments are pretty much spot on imo
Pretty much everything has been said. Personally I don't put my SAT and ACT scores, but that's preference I suppose. At any rate you can put them in the same line to condense things. Do you know any foreign language? If so you should definitley put that. If you only know English, then of course don't put that down.
For the bullet points, make sure you indent the second line if your point runs into a second line, otherwise it looks messy. Allign all your dates in one column, for example allign all your dates on the right. It fills up white space and makes it easier for the reader to follow what you have done when. Make sure you put a date for everything. For example, for football, don't say for 3 years, but rather put a date column on the right and write September 2005 - May 2008 or whatever. Same goes for your work experience.
thanks alphaholic
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Alphaholic nailed it, my only suggestion would be to use a better font. Personally, I'm inclined to Times and also take out the Additional Info. part imo its pointless. Also, eliminate the part of MS Word, Excel, PP its not noteworthy and kind of required in any profession so its taking up unnecessary space. Also, take out your ACT/SAT scores which I might add it is impossible to score a 2115 as SAT scores go in multiples of ten. Other then that, I'd follow alphaholic's advice because you've got great everything just make it look appealing with the proper format and you're good to go for an interview, at least.
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