5/24/12

Thanks ahead of time for any constructive criticism you can offer. My goal is to break into trading. I will be doing a ms in finance at a respectable program that should see some decent recruiting.

I will give out silver bananas and/or a demonoid invitation code if you want one for constructive criticism. PM me for those.

Thanks again
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5/24/12

izgleda dobro

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5/24/12

add department after to summer/winter analyst i.e. "Summer Analyst, Investment Banking"

5/24/12

izgleda dobro, mada mozes da odradis dosta "polishing" sto se tice minornih stvari

koristi skracenice za mesece (jan umesto jannuary)

za trading je dosta potreban "achievers mentality"
prilagodi svoj CV tome - npr dobro si uradio u delu "Establishing $25MM Fed Funds Line"
probaj da se u globalu stalno vidi da si nesto "achieved", "gained", "learned" - a ne samo da si prisustvovao..

nemoj da koristis u recenicama istu rec koja ocigledno implicira iz prethodne recenice
"Fed Challenge Team
-One of... to the Fed Challenge Team"

final score - napisi numericku vrednost, nemoj samo da ostavis da je bio highest
takodje, ubaci svuda gde mozes procente, rezultate i druge numericke vrendosti, posebno sto se tice winter analyst

nisam siguran kakav je zapravo format tvog CV, to je esencijaln deo; ako hoces posalji mi PM, mogu da ti dam svoj email pa da pogledam
poradi malo na bullet-ima, probaj da iskoristis prostor jos vise efficient - definitivno ima mesta za to; a onda ubaci jos relevantih informacija, ili prosto dodaj jos nesto sto ce ti pomoci da bolje prodas sebe i ucinis sebe vise "unique", jer ako apliciras za nesto top tier, bice ljudi koji ce u startu da imaju vise da ponude sto se tice iskustva i formalnih stvari

porazmisli sta to tebe cini tako unikatnim - zbog cega bas ti? -i potrudi se da na ovo pitanje ne das generican ili ocigledan odgovor, vec nesto sto HR nije cuo do sada

poker - odlicno :)
ali basket, kola i pecanje zameni necim vise specificnim.. recimo odredjena vrsta pecanja (ili pecanje odredjene ribe), automobile takodje zameni necim odredjenijim... ovaj deo iako je mali treba da da dusu tvom CV-ju

probaj da sto vise postujes i iskoristis tu jednu stranu CV, sto ne znaci da je popunis do max, vec da bude vizuelno veoma lepa, a u isto vreme da kvalitet i odabir reci bude odlican
sve i naizgled nebitne stvari treba na neki nacin da sadrze osobinu koja je potrebna za trading

5/24/12

This is a nitpick, but make sure you're consistent with the listing of your GPA. That is, should be:

GPA: 3.45/4.00; Major: 3.7X/4.00.

I'd also recommend getting rid of the "Selected Experience:" section under the Winter Analyst position, as well as the "Visiting Portfolio Companies" and "Created Transaction Database". They're just taking up space and redundant with the bullet-points below. Make the bullet-points below just regular bullet points. So just make bullet points underneath that position:

-Worked directly....
-Interacted with....
-Attended board meetings...
-Created a transaction database....

Same exercise for stockbroker trainee. Just make that two bullet-points.

You need to add some space at the bottom between "Trading activities" and "Skills & Interests". Look at the space you put between work experience and leadership experience and copy that.

Hope this helps.

5/24/12

Bullets and sub-bullets are an eyesore, which contributes to the resume's unpleasing aesthetics. Try more discrete bullets. Also, make the sentences more concise and keep them to a maximum of a line.

5/24/12
5/24/12

If you put down math minor, don't list Calc 1/2/3, etc. those are obvious to anyone that would bother to read your resume.

5/24/12

For the winter analyst position you have two different tenses; 'visiting' and 'created'. Looking through the rest of your points you seem to have gone for the present tense for the titles, so maybe created should be changed. Only a very minor point though.

In reply to FutureBanker09
5/24/12

FutureBanker09:
McIntire?

yep...i guess I could have done a better job concealing that.

"Life all comes down to a few moments. This is one of them." - Bud Fox

In reply to Dimethyltryptamine
5/24/12

Dimethyltryptamine:
izgleda dobro, mada mozes da odradis dosta "polishing" sto se tice minornih stvari

koristi skracenice za mesece (jan umesto jannuary)

za trading je dosta potreban "achievers mentality"
prilagodi svoj CV tome - npr dobro si uradio u delu "Establishing $25MM Fed Funds Line"
probaj da se u globalu stalno vidi da si nesto "achieved", "gained", "learned" - a ne samo da si prisustvovao..

nemoj da koristis u recenicama istu rec koja ocigledno implicira iz prethodne recenice
"Fed Challenge Team
-One of... to the Fed Challenge Team"

final score - napisi numericku vrednost, nemoj samo da ostavis da je bio highest
takodje, ubaci svuda gde mozes procente, rezultate i druge numericke vrendosti, posebno sto se tice winter analyst

nisam siguran kakav je zapravo format tvog CV, to je esencijaln deo; ako hoces posalji mi PM, mogu da ti dam svoj email pa da pogledam
poradi malo na bullet-ima, probaj da iskoristis prostor jos vise efficient - definitivno ima mesta za to; a onda ubaci jos relevantih informacija, ili prosto dodaj jos nesto sto ce ti pomoci da bolje prodas sebe i ucinis sebe vise "unique", jer ako apliciras za nesto top tier, bice ljudi koji ce u startu da imaju vise da ponude sto se tice iskustva i formalnih stvari

porazmisli sta to tebe cini tako unikatnim - zbog cega bas ti? -i potrudi se da na ovo pitanje ne das generican ili ocigledan odgovor, vec nesto sto HR nije cuo do sada

poker - odlicno :)
ali basket, kola i pecanje zameni necim vise specificnim.. recimo odredjena vrsta pecanja (ili pecanje odredjene ribe), automobile takodje zameni necim odredjenijim... ovaj deo iako je mali treba da da dusu tvom CV-ju

probaj da sto vise postujes i iskoristis tu jednu stranu CV, sto ne znaci da je popunis do max, vec da bude vizuelno veoma lepa, a u isto vreme da kvalitet i odabir reci bude odlican
sve i naizgled nebitne stvari treba na neki nacin da sadrze osobinu koja je potrebna za trading

thanks so much. this was very helpful

"Life all comes down to a few moments. This is one of them." - Bud Fox

6/8/12

bump

"Life all comes down to a few moments. This is one of them." - Bud Fox

6/8/12

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