The beef on my Resume
Hi all,
So I am having trouble deciding what to keep/remove on my resume, to keep the one page format, for a FT or SA position at an IB (preferably in FS/LevFin) after this summer.
A little background about me, I am in my 4th year (out of 5) of a dual bachelors program (Finance and German) at a non-target. GPA is around a 3.3 (I still have 1 more year to get this up to a 3.4-3.5).
I am currently doing a year abroad in Germany (mandatory for my German degree), where I studied for 6 months and now I am doing a 6 month internship.
Do people still put an "Objective" section on their resumes? I included what I have on mine. Of course I tailor this to what position I am working for.
If I keep the Objective section, I can fit 3 internships and the leadership experience.
If I remove the Objective section, I can fit 4 internships and the leadership experience.
Please keep in mind that this is not the formatting of my actual resume, I am purely asking for feedback on the content and what to keep or remove.
After I make up my mind and take all suggestions into account, I will upload my resume.
Thanks in advance,
borby
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You need to put it in the proper format to get better comments.
You don't need an objective. Do not use the phrase 'prestigious alumni', either say 'alumni' or something that describes the alumni. You have to keep it to 1 page. I think most places will just throw it out if it's 2 pages for a college student, it either comes off as arrogant or someone who doesn't know how to prioritize.
As far as the stuff under your University, you can cut all of this stuff. It just looks like fluff to me.
*Provided leadership and guidance to a group of first year students *Designed and facilitated activities for new incoming first year students *Helped develop the growth of students individually, socially, and academically *Used knowledge of group dynamics to help students become acquainted and establish a bond with the University *Coached students on success strategies for managing freshman year and the importance of giving back to the community
Thanks for the feedback on my leadership experience Dubya.
I have a resume formatted already, but the problem is deciding what to put on it. I understand that it should be one page long and intend to make it so.,
I am specifically asking about the content (e.g. which to keep on my resume, the bullet points, etc.)
Formatting thing aside, your resume needs quite a bit of work to catch banks attention with your GPA and coming from a non feeder school.
Wish I had time to give you some more specific advise, however few quick things popped out immediately:
Know you're a young guy and no offense, but your bullet descriptions absolutely blow. You switch from past tense to present for seemingly no reason, you have a few action verbs / adjectives but you repeat them and they don't really impress anything meaningful. They also lack detail on what you were staffed w/, what problems you solved, what you learned that is of potential value add and more importantly how were a benefit for your team. Granted people agonize way too much over packing a lot of impact and detail into their bullets given that 80-90% of it doesn't even get read, but you need to look at some MSI sample templates and try to copy to the language and descriptive tones they give
Hat's off for landing a number of mostly applicable internships, but your bottom 2-3 are worthless in terms of selling yourself as a competitive candidate. Take your top 1-2 where you had the most substantive experience and go into detail with those highlighting some of the things I mentioned above. The bottom ones, shorten to one maybe two bullets, they're there just to show you did them / get credit for them
Where's your education section? Fuck the objective shit at the top, most guys will toss your rez just for having that. Take that junk out and replace with your educational background, shorten your mentor program deal to one bullet and stick beneath Major, GPA and test scores
At the end, put a section called "other" or whatever. First line, put your foreign language skills and any applicable technical skills you have (programming languages, Bloomberg proficiency, et al). Beneath, put a line for interests and list the shit you like to do for fun. DONT put getting shitfaced w/ your bros, hanging out on the beach, sleeping in till 3 PM or any other slacker shit like that. Good examples are harmless / somewhat interesting stuff that every guy likes such as golf, cigars, college football, travel, etc.
Great stuff, thanks alot.
Some notes to your points:
The reason it is going from past to present is because the internships I did in the past are in the past tense, and the internship I am doing now is in the present tense. As far as the other feedback, thanks alot.
Will do, I just want to show that I did something during those summers and not just dicked around like a lot of other people.
I have the format all setup with my education, and will remove the objective section.
I do have this and when I am done, I will upload my completed resume for the forum to critisize again.
Has very good content, much better rez that the average WSO'er... Find a good format and repost.
Thanks, will do.
make it 1 page
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