Got Ripped First Time Around - Made Several Improvements, Need Brutal Honesty

If anyone saw my first resume, it was pretty much a disaster. I've cleaned it up a bit, but is still obviously sub par.

On top of criticism, I need some suggestions for filler material, or is that frowned upon? The resume takes up about 2/3 of the page, which means a lot of extra space.

Razume wasn't working, so hopefully this will suffice

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roymondito:
I'm pretty sure he already based it off the M&I. If I recall his previous thread, it was one of the suggestions already made.

This is correct

I made a few adjustments in the format because my lack of experience/clubs, etc.

 
GoldenMonkey:
You need to get more involved on campus ASAP
I definitely agree man. That resume seemed kinda light. Find something even if it isn't finance related, just something that demonstrated skills like leadership, creativity, analytical ability, etc..... Like I served as VP in Students in Free Enterprise. I managed a team of 50 people, that goes over very well when I'm in an interview.
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you sound like a dickbag on the swing trader experience. ever have a real job?

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Best Response

Suggestions off the top of my head:

GPA - Format should be (GPA rounding preferences aside) "3.4 / 4.0, 3.7 / 4.0" OR "3.43 / 4.00, 3.71 / 4.00" need to just use one or two decimal places and be consistent. If you took the SAT throw that score on there assuming it's decent after your GPA. if you're really trying to take up space you could put it on it's own line, otherwise state it after your GPA.

Honors - Say when you were on the Dean's list (Fall 2008 Dean's List, for example). Also - Dean's List, not Deans List. If you have a merit-based scholarship (or any other scholarship) of any kind also list that here.

Relevant Coursework - I would move "Financial Information Technology" to the end of the list of relevant coursework since I have no idea what that is and it seems to be the least relevant.

Experience - Try to go for three or four bullet points here. I know the job may not have been that interesting but you've gotta use what you have. Try to have the first bullet summarize what you did then have two or three supporting bullets. FOCUS ON RESULTS. Go read the M&I "How to Bank-ify Your Resume" article and adjust the language throughout your resume accordingly.

Activities - This section is pretty weak, but given the situation I understand why it is this way. Change it to "Activities, Skills & Interests" For activities put something like "Activities: Current Applicant to Student Managed (NAME OF FUND) and any other activities you do on campus. DO NOT put the part in about how you couldn't join earlier - they don't need to know that. For skills put "Skills: Self educated in technical analysis (Fibonacci..." For interests put something like "Interests: Participated in stock market simulators..."

Anyways, I would definitely recommend checking out as many M&I resume articles as you can find since they have really solid advice with examples that can help you and as other people said get involved ASAP to fill up the page. Good luck!

 

i will echo the thoughts of everyone else get involved now.

The answer to your question is 1) network 2) get involved 3) beef up your resume 4) repeat -happypantsmcgee WSO is not your personal search function.
 
Matthias:
Seriously though is Dean's list really an honor???

Ditto on this.

If your only "honor" is the Dean's List then I don't think it's really worth putting on there. Everyone applying who is worth a penny will be on the "Dean's List" - just a waste of white space.

 

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