I don't even know where to start from. It looks so haphazard, especially the bottom section.

Also, this line is so weak: "Supported senior bankers in M&A and pitching deals." I know you are trying to summarize in one sentence, but it is coming off as very weak.

You should also provide some numbers in your summer analyst stint. Very dry without numbers.

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Also, this line is so weak: "Supported senior bankers in M&A and pitching deals." I know you are trying to summarize in one sentence, but it is coming off as very weak.

Agree. I think you should remove that bullet altogether unless you can come up with something that is substantive and isn't redundant with your following details.
 

No one is going to help you with this title. my 0.02, your margins are horrible.

1 tip, print before you scream for help, you will spot 90% of the mistakes yourself.

 

Overall the layout is improved, but there is plenty of clean up to be done. Aside from that, the biggest thing that strikes me is the lack of uniqueness. This looks literally like a template from some website.

You really need to build out your deal experience and try to make it look like you played an active role. Too much generic terminology thrown out (I get it, we all know about the HR word searches). If I sat down with your resume and read it, I would think it was someone that wasn't heavily involved and just threw methodologies and terms on a page or someone that was involved but didn't get deep enough to understand the transaction they were involved with.

 

Thanks a lot guys. In terms of numbers should I disclose exact deal sizes? @peinvestor2012 How should I change the generic terminology? I tried to be succinct to fit it all on one page. I already cut out about a page of other experiences and jobs I've done before college. How do I improve uniqueness of my stint? Should I describe each task I did on the deal?

Any further advice would be highly appreciated!

 

If you are allowed to, then disclose deal sizes. If the info is non-public, then give an approximate value using ~.

It's not simply about what you did, but demonstrating you understood what the deal was. If it was a dividend recap, list out the $ or % for each tranche. For an M&A deal, give more color (i.e. advised a strategic on a public-to-private bid).

Also, still have formatting issues. The city, state and date should be right aligned.

 
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A minor improvement over your previous resume. No offense, but I still don't understand how you can honestly look at your resume and not notice the formatting errors, not to mention how cluttered/vague everything is. I thought most bankers had attention to detail?

If you haven't noticed your errors yet, here are some suggestions:

  • Move your locations/dates more to the right if you're going to keep these margins so small (read: change your margins to 0.5" all around; Word 2007 even has this preset for you under Page Layout > Margins > 0.5")
  • Space everything correctly. You have a lot of experience, but you should highlight the IBD experiences. If you have no space, why not just throw the extra experiences into an Activities section on the bottom?
  • Keep it to one page
 

Yes I did but I don't need to post it anymore. I had people who are MDs at GS/JPM/MS critique it for me and I would rather go with their recommendations than some people on this forum who are still in high school/college. Most of critique on this forum was constructive but as always there are trolls that are just wasting time claiming that they know what they are talking about.

 

I've seen you mislead and post wrong/idiotic answers on multiple occasions. At least it's easy to ignore a troll's advice given it's also easy to spot one (usually)...

So get off that high horse.

Under my tutelage, you will grow from boys to men. From men into gladiators. And from gladiators into SWANSONS.
 

Flake please point out when I was misleading anyone please. peinvestor2012 MBA decisions don't require having an MBA. If someone asks which school to pick just by reading WSO you can learn which schools are better/worse. I am not on a high horse, it's just a personal preference to show my resume people I trust and who are the decision makers, rather than people who claim to be someone they are not/never worked in finance. Unfortunately WSO seems to have more people like that than actual professionals. That's where my previous comment came from. My comment definitely wasn't targeted at Flake or peinvestor since I follow WSO closely enough to notice they know what they are talking about. I am sorry you took it so personally to throw monkey shit on it. Another thing that surprised me was the question if I already updated it. Who would care about that? I can't believe people take some comments personally.

 
Beny23:
Another thing that surprised me was the question if I already updated it. Who would care about that?

The problem is that those of us who gave tips/advice/suggestions took time out of our days to help fellow monkeys.

The least you could do is to show us you took our help by uploading an updated version. You essentially spat in our faces with that comment about taking your MDs' help rather than fellow monkeys who've maybe been in your position before and went through it all. What makes you think we aren't already in the industry (or do you think only Certified users are in the industry?).

It's insulting, really, and even more embarrassing how little humility you show when we're all giving pretty solid advice (especially formatting-wise, as mentioned above).

 

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