Non Target Resume - Appreciated! (UPDATED)
I was hoping for some harsh critics to look at my resume.
Thanks in advance!
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A few quick things:
1) I'd remove the GPA / Coursework bullets and align the text to the left (personal preference) 2) Align your dates all the way to the right 3) Micro Eco, Macro Eco change to Economics 4) GPA I would list as 3.3 / 4.0 5) Computation in Financial Model (Do you mean Modeling?) 6) Your bullet points are lacking in the results. They should read Did A,B,C which resulted to X,Y,Z. People care about results
Thanks for your suggestions! That is very helpful.
I listed my GPA as you mentioned and changed Eco to Economics (which make it become two line. I am still thinking to make it concise).
For "Computation in Financial Model" is all about programming model and some calibration. Is “Modeling” more accurate?
I am not sure what kind of result I can mention here. Like "Portfolio moving up 40%"?
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Thanks, Patrick
Thanks Patrick! I need work on bullets!
As lucca and Patrick pointed out your bullets/content need more work with quantitative results, so I'll just list some formatting/vocab/grammatical stuff that jumped out when I read it.
The two hyphens in your date should merge into one fine dash. Caught 4 grammatical errors - 1st bullet under XYZ Trading Group, 1st bullet under XYZ LLC, 4th bullet under Guosen, 1st bullet under XYZ Company. Missing one space before Skills in your last heading. Interests - Cooking, Cocktail Mixing, Riding would flow better I believe.
Are you from HR department? You have admirable sharp eyes. Even the one missing space can be found by you. I should be very careful next time. Thanks a lot.
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