• Sharebar

hi,
what do you monkeys think of this cover letter? thank

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Comments (7)

  • Oreos's picture

    totally redo. honestly.

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  • Newspeak's picture

    I'ma be straight with you: this is a terrible cover letter.

  • kyleyboy's picture

    I thought the letter was going in a totally different direction then it did

  • clomeo4655's picture

    stopped reading after this:

    As I had always been fascinated by finance—and especially financial modeling—I soon discovered that a bank would be a suitable working environment for me by doing a quick foray into banking in Summer 2009, doing a Summer Program at the NYSE.

    start over. be (significantly) more concise. find an english major or someone in your career services department to proofread it after your first draft as there are glaring grammar and business writing errors in what you posted. avoid cliches and hyperbole. if you go to mergers and inquisitions they have a good template to start from.

  • wallstdj's picture

    Look up cover letter templates online to give you and idea has to what the content of the letter should look like. What ever you do, don't send this one.

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