Advice for Resume
(Monkey, 41
Points)
on 11/28/12 at 4:32pm
Please take a look at my resume and tell me any suggestions you may have. What would make it stronger? What don't you like? It's a modified template from M&I.





too much white space, too
too much white space, too many classes listed causing the education space to be 50% of your resume (dont need to say three different types of accounting, or the actual exact classnames. finance, accounting, economics, stats; make it simple)
Did you do nothing as a congressional intern? That's the only one that sounds interesting and yet you are not showing you did anything worth mentioning.
Looking at your resume, I have no idea what you desire to do. If I had to guess Politics? So banks will say the same thing, need to attempt to orientate towards the field you are trying to get into
Sorry for the brash advice but its necessary
Frank Sinatra - "Alcohol may be man's worst enemy, but the bible says love your enemy."
^ Yo boss look closely at the
^ Yo boss look closely at the dates for his congressional internship again..hasnt happened yet. I agree that the education section takes up the majority of the page. List the certificate right after the MBA info and remove the space, assuming that the certificate is from the same school. Is your minor in english really worth an entire line on your resume?? I would either remove that or add it on to the same line as you degree/major.
"You lose money chasing women, never lose women chasing money"
-Nas
yeahright: too much white
too much white space, too many classes listed causing the education space to be 50% of your resume (dont need to say three different types of accounting, or the actual exact classnames. finance, accounting, economics, stats; make it simple)
Did you do nothing as a congressional intern? That's the only one that sounds interesting and yet you are not showing you did anything worth mentioning.
Looking at your resume, I have no idea what you desire to do. If I had to guess Politics? So banks will say the same thing, need to attempt to orientate towards the field you are trying to get into
Sorry for the brash advice but its necessary
Looks like the congressional internship starts in Jan 2013, hence no bullets.
I agree there is too much white space... can you add more details to your other past experiences? Also, I might recommend that you add a line at the very bottom listing some of your interests, to show a bit more of your personality and create the possibility that you and your interviewer might have something in common.
Why did you go to Texas Tech
Why did you go to Texas Tech
http://sportstanker.blogspot.com/
why are you getting an MBA
why are you getting an MBA with no experience. and beyond that from a shit school. noobacabra.
No point in blacking out the
No point in blacking out the school if your leaving the town.
"The way to make money is to buy when blood is running in the streets."
-John D. Rockefeller
The user name gives it away
The user name gives it away too
"You lose money chasing women, never lose women chasing money"
-Nas
Thanks for the people who
Thanks for the people who actually gave resume advice. I'm here to have my peers help me develop a better resume, so please do not trash my school. I'm a proud Raider and a proud Texan. I have no plans to ever attend a northeastern school, nor do I plan on ever moving to New York. I'm just looking for resume help, work experience suggestions, and things I can do to break into finance.
Red Raider: Please take a
Please take a look at my resume and tell me any suggestions you may have. What would make it stronger? What don't you like? It's a modified template from M&I.
http://www.razume.com/documents/28712
WSO Resume Review Score*: 8 (out of 15 possible)
1. Wording/Bullets: 2.5
2. Layout/Format: 3.5
3. Overall: 2
* Note: This score is based on a subjective assessment of three different criteria all on a 1 to 5 scale (1 = poor, 2 = below avg, 3 = average, 4 = very good, 5 = excellent) based on my own experience reviewing thousands of resumes in the past and based on the current state of the posted resume.
Some explanation of the grading:
1, Wording/Bullets: This score represents the overall wording of the bullets and content throughout the resume. Are there action words? are the experiences explained clearly? Does the candidate quantify their impact where possible?
2. Layout/Format: This score represents to overall layout and format. Finance professionals are notorious for being anal. Although this score is somewhat subjective, there are certain things we look for including consistency, spacing, clean look, clear sections, proper order, etc.
3. Overall: This score represents the experiences and school of the candidate and is the hardest to change in the short term. Improving the Wording/Bullets and Layout/Format scores can bump this grade up (usually by 1 grade at most), however, this grade depends largely on the School, GPA, Internships, Leadership, Extracurriculars of the applicant, etc.
We are going to try to provide a candid / direct grading system for as many resumes as we can in this Public Resume Review forum, with the hopes that it will lead candidates that need help on #1. and #2 criteria to consider the WSO Resume Review service that has experienced professionals ready to help bring the #1 and #2 score as close to a 4 or 5 as possible. Due to time contraints, I can't provide more detail and I can only provide this grade to each candidate once (if you try to repost and updated version under a different username, i will recognize it and ignore). What I will say is that if you aren't at a 4 or 5 in Wording and Layout, we can probably help you make significant improvments.
Some more guidelines for total overall score:
3 - 6: Needs MAJOR help / improvements in several areas
7 - 8: Has some major flaws but also has some good areas
9 - 11: An average to slightly above average resume that could still use some help but it is on "ok" shape
12 - 13: A competitive resume that should be able to land some competitive interviews
14 - 15: An impressive resume on all or almost all levels. Wording/Bullets/Layout/format and overall experience, grades, school, etc are all excellent or very good.
We suggest if you score in the bottom 3 categories listed above that you strongly consider the WSO Resume Review service. Whatever you decide, best of luck!
Thanks,
Patrick
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