resume review for hedge fund

Education should be at bottom for an experienced hire. Unless your ugrad gpa is horrible, include it.

Is there meant to be something after "Hedge fund analyst," and the other roles? Otherwise commas are hanging

Just write UBS, no need for the whole name

Lose the middle school award. I mean, seriously, I get that you're asian, but give it a break.

The Malaysian IPO is presumably no longer confidential, so mention the company name

"over 200+" is redundant. No need to say "(online)" data

"Performed valuation modeling..." has several grammatical errors

"Assisted the founder in founding..." repeats a word and has grammatical errors

In general, your grammar just sucks. I'm not going to bother going through and pointing out every place you screwed up. If this came across my desk, you'd be dinged in half the time it took me to write this. Take another shot at it, or ask a native English speaker to help you.