Anyone care to take a quick look at my resume?

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Greetings,
I have a completely non-traditional background. Came to the U.S at age 16, lived with relatives until age 19 and started doing odd jobs while trying to get myself in school. I have a very very long story but I graduated a year ago and all I have secured is an internship that is ending soon. I have applied to hundreds of places and only had one interview. I do believe that there maybe lots of things wrong with my resume, please share your feedback. Real name etc has been altered.

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Dec 17, 2018
  1. Take off "Phone-". Just put the number.
  2. Put the dates you worked as a Taxi Driver. Also the font looks slightly bigger. Decrease that font to the same size as the others. Make the format the same (company above, position below), like the others.
  3. I think the city label for Delta Airlines is on the line above (New York, NY). The other city labels are on the same line, bring that down.
  4. Take that comma off after "French,"

Your resume just seems very 'middle of the pack'. Nothing really stands out except for the fact that you hustled your way through college. This internship seems like good experience. If they won't extend an offer, you better be busting your ass just to get a lead or recommendation from them. Even if you can't get anything and leave the internship without any new job in hand, this recommendation may be the thing that seals the deal on a new gig. You might have some luck with small shops and possibly just telling the PM or MD to call your current boss for feedback if needed.

"If you always put limits on everything you do, physical or anything else, it will spread into your work and into your life. There are no limits. There are only plateaus, and you must not stay there, you must go beyond them." - Bruce Lee

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Dec 17, 2018

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Dec 17, 2018

I don't know who MSed you (or why?), but thought this was good. I felt it was a bit hard to read as well, in a general sense as in things just didn't flow. You defined many of them here.

"If you always put limits on everything you do, physical or anything else, it will spread into your work and into your life. There are no limits. There are only plateaus, and you must not stay there, you must go beyond them." - Bruce Lee

Dec 19, 2018
Isaiah_53_5:

Your resume just seems very 'middle of the pack'. Nothing really stands out except for the fact that you hustled your way through college. This internship seems like good experience. If they won't extend an offer, you better be busting your ass just to get a lead or recommendation from them. Even if you can't get anything and leave the internship without any new job in hand, this recommendation may be the thing that seals the deal on a new gig. You might have some luck with small shops and possibly just telling the PM or MD to call your current boss for feedback if needed.

I will make sure that I get a recommendation from them. Currently, my biggest challenge is getting any response from recruiters. But I now understand that there were many stupid errors on my resume so hopefully that will make a difference.

Dec 17, 2018

In addition to the above, yours is an example of a resume where an intro paragraph would be a huge help. I don't usually say that but it's really hard to see a "story" looking at the above. How this reads to me is: "average cumulative GPA, no clue what they want to do, and this person may or may not be 50 years old".

I'd remove the taxi experience altogether unless you are actually an older candidate and need to fill a large block of time pre-2012. I used to dress up as the bird at Red Robin and learned you really don't need every bit of work experience on your resume if it doesn't help tell your story.

I'd also figure out exactly what you want to do and highlight the relevant skills from your time at Delta and Stratfor. You may need multiple versions of your resume if you're applying for different types of roles and that is ok - just make sure you tell a logical story. E.g. if you're applying for FP&A roles make sure you stick to the relevant points for financial analysis.

What type of roles have you been applying for?

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Dec 19, 2018

Mostly I have been applying to positions that do not require too much experience. I hardly come across any posting that does not ask for previous experience in modeling, summer internship etc.
So I usually apply for internships and the problem with internships is that they require an active enrollment at school.

Dec 17, 2018

Nothing to add that hasn't already been said. Just want to say that I respect your hustle.

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Dec 18, 2018

Lots of good advice already given. My advice is to totally rework your bullet points for all 3 jobs, because if you write them correctly it tells an interesting story (taxi driver to airline employee to finance is very uncommon)

In "macro-economic figures" account balance, client's debt, etc are definitely not macro factors. That is an automatic ding, so fix that while you're re-writing your bullet points.

Beyond that, make bullet points more dynamic. "seek out investment ideas" - what did you seek out, what software did you use, what suggestions did you make? Quantify them and make the bullet points way more detailed. Use numbers.

Same goes for Delta and taxi driver. Did you drive 10pm-6am, (or whatever the hours are)? Put that. I would have 3 good quality bullet points for Delta and 2 for taxi, it seems like you have a ton of extra room to have that anyway.

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Dec 18, 2018

Get rid of the 40 hours thing. I was in a similar situation and wait for them to ask you about it in the interview. No need to try to make it look better than it is on your resume. The GPA is low but not can't-talk-your-way-around low.

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Dec 18, 2018

1) I would suggest removing both the Gate Agent and Taxi Driver jobs entirely from your resume.

2) i suggest taking an online course (free) and teach yourself how to program (Python)....then take another online course (free) and learn how to build neural nets using TensorFlow

3) then add onto your resume
Self Taught Python Data Scientist in AI/Machine Learning programming with TensorFlow.

just google it...you're welcome

Dec 19, 2018

You are the second person to suggest this, I am really looking at python especially. One time I had an interview at a derivatives trading shop downtown and they told me that it would have been very useful if i had some programming skills, python in particular.

Dec 19, 2018

start by watching this python youtube course

just google it...you're welcome

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Dec 18, 2018

Also, just FYI....uber drivers make 25-30/hour on avg in NYC (mostly because of surge pricing)....and if you work 12 hour days, 6 days a week...thats 90k/year

just google it...you're welcome

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Dec 19, 2018

I've read that stat too, i thinks its BS though, these drivers have to pay for fuel, maintenance +wear/tear etc.... 25-30 in revenue for sure... I think they're netting min wage......

thots and prayers

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Dec 19, 2018

I have done them all. Getting the licensing to drive a cab in NYC was a complicated and costly process so I used to drive gypsy cab in the Bronx and Brooklyn overnight shifts. This was like when I was a sophomore tho and was like 24 years old . It was actually surprisingly very good money with no taxes but the problem was that I was getting robbed about once every two weeks or so since people know that illegal gypsies won't get cops involved. Also once in a while I would have my car taken by cops (usually beat up cars we buy for like 3k) and would have to get a different one from auctions. So at the end, half my income would disappear like that. Then I got my TLC license and been doing both yellow cabs and Uber/lyft. You can make 90k a year on UBER if you own your car and put in about 70 hours a week with minimum tax. But it is difficult to work 70 hrs a week consistently for the entire year. For example, they suspend my license for every little issue that comes up and I would be out of work for a week and pay exorbitant fines. (The city is very corrupt btw). It is hard to avoid trouble when you are on NYC streets 70 hours a week and what is a better target than an uber driver for a cop that needs to fill his quota. Also car can break down or accidents happen.

Dec 19, 2018

I really appreciate every single feedback I have received here. It means a lot to me.

Apr 29, 2019
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