I decided to change my cold email template for networking to generate more responses and was hoping that someone could critique my cold mail. I have searched the forums and taken a bit here and there from a lot of the useful threads that I found.
My name is xxxxxx, I'm a student at xxxxxx University, majoring in finance. I am interested in learning more about investment banking and xxxxxxxxx in particular. I understand the uphill challenge that I'm facing coming from a non-target school, which has propelled me to work hard daily by educating myself through books, guides, and courses. I would like to learn more about your experience in the industry and listen to any advice that you could give me. Please let me know when/how best to reach you. It wont take any more than 15 minutes. Thanks.