CV Review - please rip my CV apart

I will be applying for summer internships at the BB (JPMC, Goldman, MS) and the elite boutiques (Rothchilds, Lazard) in the Autumn. I'm looking for constructive criticism to my CV.

In particular, I would be interested in which bullet points are weakest and could be removed. I'm hoping to get some more leadership experience to add to my CV. I also want each bullet point to add value - if a bullet point does not add value, it makes the CV look less mature.

I'd be really interested hearing from Analysts whether (if they received my CV) they would want to read the cover letter or offer an interview. If not, how can the CV be improved for next year? Where do you think the weaknesses are (is it the structure or achievements).

I will be applying for IBD in London. Please be brutal.

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Mar 25, 2017

Any volunteering experience? If so it might be good to add it, at least in my experience anyways.

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Mar 25, 2017

I can do some volunteering over the summer. Should it be international or can it be local?

Mar 25, 2017

Uh not sure, I mention it because in my experience when I was going for interviews the resume would be read top to bottom, anything (and I mean anything - any bullet point is fair game basically) the interviewer(s) found interesting it would become a conversation. Talking about my volunteering experiences I feel set me apart, made me look well-rounded if you get what I'm getting at. Afterall, there's some empty space towards the bottom of your CV so there could be room for it

Mar 25, 2017

"Lazarus" - hope you fix that when it's time to write your Lazard cover letter.

When we screened for resumes, HR would hand busy analysts a PDF of 200 resumes and they'd glance at each for maybe 5-10 seconds max before deciding if they wanted to scrap it. The easiest things to look at: University, GPA, latest work experience.

What does "Grades: 2:1 Predicted" mean? I could be ignorant but if that isn't the London convention (like a 4.0 scale GPA is in the US), I'd either change it to the convention or explain it. Also, nothing on your resume should be "predicted" or "expected" or "incoming".

The only reputable experience on your resume seems to be your upcoming spring internship at Deloitte. I would make sure you fill that out (3-4 solid bullet points) once you complete the internship and try to make it sound applicable to IBD.

There is a lot of real estate being given to your society positions, which is good, but not that relevant. It doesn't seem like a huge deal right now given that you don't have much else to fill it up with in the way of real work experience (unless you do, in which case I'd do that). Generally, I'd suggest having one section dedicated to actual professional experience (ie Deloitte internship) and a separate section to leadership & extracurriculars (anything related to societies, charity, sports, etc).

Mar 26, 2017

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Mar 26, 2017

Cut the white space. And show us your CV after your summer internship. Too little content to judge otherwise.

Also, develop leadership skills in volunteering position. And no need to mention in detail that you went backpacking across Australia - just write backpacking abroad or some shit

Also, if your activities include learning a class on coursera, I feel sorry for you. You might want to add societies in that section, like debating, quizzing, drama, etc.

GoldenCinderblock: "I keep spending all my money on exotic fish so my armor sucks. Is it possible to romance multiple females? I got with the blue chick so far but I am also interested in the electronic chick and the face mask chick."

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Mar 26, 2017

Thank you for the advice. I can add some interesting extra-curricular activities. I used to list them but I was advised to remove it. I'm a member of the Surfing Society so I can add that. Could I ask what value do you think it adds? Does it make the applicant more human and more relatable? Or is it really useful in interviews.

I'll be able to fill the white spaces by Autumn. I should gain two more executive positions by then which I can add.

Could I ask a question about volunteering positions. I'm on the executive of two university societies which both are volunteering positions (you don't get paid) which gives you leadership experience. What would the difference be between that and a charity? Would the latter add value by make you appear a more conscientious person?

Mar 26, 2017

Yeah, by volunteering, I meant charity stuff. What are those two university societies about?

GoldenCinderblock: "I keep spending all my money on exotic fish so my armor sucks. Is it possible to romance multiple females? I got with the blue chick so far but I am also interested in the electronic chick and the face mask chick."

Mar 26, 2017

I've never heard of that GPA scale before... And do you have any standardized test? SAT, ACT, English equivalents to these tests? Any languages / computer skills?

I wouldn't delete any bullet points, you have some white space as is. Although I hate bullet points with multiple sentences in them FYI.

Do a sport is my advice honestly (typical American advice). I'm a little biased, but I know my sport is why I've gotten 70% of the positions I was offered. Cheers.

Mar 26, 2017

It's the UK system boy. OP clearly mentioned that.

First class honors >> 2:1 >> 2:2 >> Pass

Sports not so effective in the UK as in the US, but seriously, get some "fun" extra-currics". Anyone who wants to discuss finance with me every time we meet, and talks about how his favorite billionaire is Henry Kravis is imho, a fuckin' loser.

GoldenCinderblock: "I keep spending all my money on exotic fish so my armor sucks. Is it possible to romance multiple females? I got with the blue chick so far but I am also interested in the electronic chick and the face mask chick."

Mar 26, 2017

-there is a really good CV template for the header somewhere on this platform. try to locate it as your CV top seems quite "lost"
-elaborate more your mark. is it a upper second class? use your percentage score-better having a 6x% than a 2.1 as the range is too broad
-try also to use absolute numbers for your description.
-have you been to any workshops, firm sponsored events
-language skills? only english?
-what about tech skills?
-name your alevel school
-Activities should really but anything other than business related. it looks like you are a smart ass and nobody likes them (i dont implement this to you ;))

Generally, and already as mentioned, i would rather wait till your finish your internship experience. application didnt start for IBD yet. maybe you should consider spring weeks for BB before applying for an internship

Mar 26, 2017

That 's useful - I'll try and find the CV template. Thank you!

Mar 26, 2017

Also for activities, what do I put? I'm part of the Surfing Society - do I just put: Member of the Surfing Society. I could also start writing articles for the University Newspaper? Could that also be something I could put in the activities section: Contributor to Warwick Boar (writes articles on politics and technology)?

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