May 21, 2013

Please tear apart my Résumé

Graduating from my MBA program in December and looking for some help with my résumé. Thanks

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CanadianGekko

10y

There is a lot of "space" on your resume. I would reduce some wordage from the fraternity section and bolster your work experience with more tangible, measurable examples of success. Also, add more personal information (i.e. languages, interests, etc.)

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rufiolove

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Wheels up for next few hours but at first glance, couple of comments... pls see below:

Would convert to M&I format.
Graduate Assistant position; pls quantify exp.
Investments Intern position; pls quantify exp. (i.e. analysis/ratios used)
Financial Intern position; first bullet; not grammatically correct - revise and strengthen; second bullet: pls be more specific; third bullet: and?
Fraternity experience; increased membership 86.6%? So went from 15 members to 28? Would just say doubled membership... also, no one believes increase is due to "cohesiveness" pls fix to say "Doubled membership by throwing sick ass parties"
Computer skills; Pls remove SPSS as no one knows what that is, remove "Terminal" and "(limited)" after "Bloomberg"

Touching down in ~4 hours and can review in more detail at hotel. Pls courier a copy to Four Seasons and have concierge deliver.

Mny thx.

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goblan

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rufiolove:

Wheels up for next few hours but at first glance, couple of comments... pls see below:

- Would convert to M&I format.
- Graduate Assistant position; pls quantify exp.
- Investments Intern position; pls quantify exp. (i.e. analysis/ratios used)
- Financial Intern position; first bullet; not grammatically correct - revise and strengthen; second bullet: pls be more specific; third bullet: and?
- Fraternity experience; increased membership 86.6%? So went from 15 members to 28? Would just say doubled membership... also, no one believes increase is due to "cohesiveness" pls fix to say "Doubled membership by throwing sick ass parties"
- Computer skills; Pls remove SPSS as no one knows what that is, remove "Terminal" and "(limited)" after "Bloomberg"

Touching down in ~4 hours and can review in more detail at hotel. Pls courier a copy to Four Seasons and have concierge deliver.

Mny thx.

thx 4 that gud advice, mny thnx, pls giv moar 2 me, k thx bai

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rufiolove

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goblan:

rufiolove:

Wheels up for next few hours but at first glance, couple of comments... pls see below:
- Would convert to M&I format.
- Graduate Assistant position; pls quantify exp.
- Investments Intern position; pls quantify exp. (i.e. analysis/ratios used)
- Financial Intern position; first bullet; not grammatically correct - revise and strengthen; second bullet: pls be more specific; third bullet: and?
- Fraternity experience; increased membership 86.6%? So went from 15 members to 28? Would just say doubled membership... also, no one believes increase is due to "cohesiveness" pls fix to say "Doubled membership by throwing sick ass parties"
- Computer skills; Pls remove SPSS as no one knows what that is, remove "Terminal" and "(limited)" after "Bloomberg"
Touching down in ~4 hours and can review in more detail at hotel. Pls courier a copy to Four Seasons and have concierge deliver.
Mny thx.

thx 4 that gud advice, mny thnx, pls giv moar 2 me, k thx bai

Intern, great work on this coffee, just the right temp. Could you pls make me a PIB now? Mny thx.

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Nomadchimp

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I like the format of your CV. Everything is done in one page.

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justin88

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I would immediately delete any email with an attachment called "ResumePDF.pdf". It's 2013; that level of computer illiteracy is unacceptable.

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goblan

10y

justin88:

I would immediately delete any email with an attachment called "ResumePDF.pdf". It's 2013; that level of computer illiteracy is unacceptable.

It's just for posting on WSO. It'd be dumb to post his full name here.

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rufiolove

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goblan:

justin88:

I would immediately delete any email with an attachment called "ResumePDF.pdf". It's 2013; that level of computer illiteracy is unacceptable.

It's just for posting on WSO. It'd be dumb to post his full name here.

And Resume.pdf was taken so he had to get creative...

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Beny23

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Put education at the top of your resume.

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Munselle

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