Roast my cover letter
Broke asfuck and cant hire anyone to review my cover letter. This is for an MBB office btw. I haven't put much thought into it being consulting centric, but I borrowed this overall structure from an old WSO post:
I am immensely excited to apply for an Associate position at [company’s] office in City. Having heard about the firm and opportunities during a career fair at [my university], I was very intrigued to apply. Speaking to [company’s] representatives along with consultants including [name 1], [name 2], and [name 3] was a very positive experience. I learned briefly what makes company such a powerhouse when it comes to management consulting and solutions. The expansive network of the firm and the significance of the firm’s engagements, among many other things, are what truly make company a unique place. As such, I am excited to become a part of the team. I believe my skills and qualifications do make me a good candidate.
My interest in Consulting has been piqued since I first learned about the field. As such, I have tried to the best of my ability to learn all I could about the field and develop the necessary skillset required to successfully join the field. The complex but intriguing world of Consulting invites inquisitiveness and a variety of interconnected skills.
During my work experience as a Valuation Analyst, I have learned what it truly means to engage with clients seeking a distinguished service. I have been assigned to various tasks covering very technical and quantitative sides of Valuation and also engaging with the client, through presentations and formal calls, in order to refine our service and improve outcome. I have developed many skills that are key in succeeding in Consulting.
Based on this, I am hopeful my application is given consideration soon. I appreciate the time and effort dedicated to attract new talent at Firm. I am willing to everything in my ability to provide a return on investment.
Thoughts :/
I began reviewing and revising the cover letter, but the more I edited, the more I realized you have fundamentally added too much fluff or empty words into the cover letter. I apologize for the brutal review, but allow me to breakdown the anatomy of my suggested cover letter design for MBB firms.
Overall, I would advise strengthening the contents, writing in more succinct and formal structure. Edit - shoot over a pm and I'll send over a few samples/examples.
Introduction Paragraph
Body #1 - Why Consulting
Body #2 - Why This Firm
Conclusion
I am writing a cover letter and I namedrop people in the last paragraph, do you think it's advisable to move it to the first paragraph for eye-catching reason ? I follow the template here: https://managementconsulted.com/consulting-cover-letter/. Thank you !
I usually follow the general template below. Usually works out, I followed this template for MBB, ER roles, Economist roles, Economic Consulting, and Industry, and I usually got R1 interviews. Now at MBB.
_______________________________________
Dear Sir / Madam / Recruitment Team / etc.
First Name LAST NAME [typical closing]
Honestly- it's so much and so hard to read. I would shorten it to be more concise and use less "buzz words". Also- at first glance it reads as if you are coming out of undergrad and are applying for an associate role. I'd move your analyst experience reference up to earlier in the letter. Lead with your qualifications and experience rather than your enthusiasm. Good luck.
Do cover letters actually matter / make a difference to one's application?
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