please critique resume for FT--semi-target

Get rid of relevant coursework header. Put it under education

1. Just have GPA at "3.5"; it's assumed to be out of 4.0 by default. Get rid of your SAT score; usually if it's not 98-99th percentile or a perfect math score I would just leave it off.
2. "Key analyst responsible for project management and execution." Yeah ok that sounds good but what did you actually DO as the key analyst? Elaborate... your later points do not go into specifics either
3. "Personally coached private equity associates in preparation for pitches to LPs" --> I think I know what you're trying to say, but right now it sounds stupid. English isn't your first language, is it?
4. Get rid of the Starbucks barista
5. Your resume sounds very... Chinese. Are you looking for FT in HK or NY?

Make sure all your dates are perfectly aligned right (ex. under extracurriculars, Fall 2009-Present and Spring 2010-Present are clearly not aligned properly)