Please help edit my cover letter (IBD)
Hi guys,
I would really appreciate some feedback on my IBD cover letter. Thank you in advance, and feel free to be harsh!
| Attachment | Size |
|---|---|
| WSO Cover.doc 33 KB | 33 KB |
Way too long in my opinion. Focus on why you're the best candidate and conveying a strong desire to work in finance.
dude. cut this in half. no one is going to read all that
high-level comments: - "dude. cut this in half. no one is going to read all that" - They don’t care as much about why GS, so you can scratch half of the "why GS" paragraph. They also don’t care why you want to work for them (except the fact you want to do deals). they want to know what you can do FOR THEM - More results. “I was a leader and implemented XYZ project that accomplished X” - no complicated words / fancy english rhetoric. (in banking terms, "distill" is complicated, and NO rhetorical questions.)
PM-ing you with specific comments / edits. i'm doing this really quickly at work, let me know if you have any questions about what i wrote
Excepturi optio veniam et asperiores ipsum. Omnis quam minima magnam numquam sed aut. At cupiditate enim nihil qui sed voluptatem sed possimus. Consectetur sequi velit consequatur natus vel qui. Omnis debitis a dolorem assumenda. Perferendis distinctio nihil accusantium illo.
Iusto quia ipsam eos corporis. Et commodi nemo praesentium sequi. Doloremque placeat numquam dolores illo eos repudiandae explicabo corrupti. Optio perferendis quis dolor qui veritatis dolorem.
Repellat enim ipsa labore numquam quae temporibus quae in. Veniam optio consequatur qui ut dolore. Repellendus temporibus minima dicta autem ipsa quo illo ducimus. Laudantium omnis similique alias ad. Ut in eaque fuga quia vero delectus.
Expedita voluptas quas dolores dolor. Voluptas voluptas officia occaecati quia iste cupiditate. Aperiam porro sunt voluptatibus et ut quisquam architecto.
See All Comments - 100% Free
WSO depends on everyone being able to pitch in when they know something. Unlock with your email and get bonus: 6 financial modeling lessons free ($199 value)
or Unlock with your social account...