I am applying to PIMCO, and submitting tomorrow night. I've asked for a lot of advice before and taken it. Please read if you have time and can give me a final review
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Right off the bat - your verbs are too weak. "Learned about", "worked with", "participated in"...these are all super passive.
Wtf is "insanity: asylum? Is that the workout program? Looks really weird... Also, take off fantasy football.
4 interests max. Also agree your interests make you seem a bit weird.
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