Please review my Non Target resume

Take relaxing with friends out of your interests and put the 25 hrs per week in a bullet point, not under the date.

man, I am not a native speaker myself, but you really need to work on your grammar.

"Skills Interes"

1.) Make bullets for work experience activities and add some detail 2.) You are doing all 4 of these "work experiences" currently? If in some way shape or form you are, make sure the verbiage is congruent throughout (past tense all around, or present tense all around) 3.) change your whole bottom section 4.) Make margins smaller 5.) take the 25 hrs a week out

relaxing with friends is not an interest so take it off take the 25 hrs a week out work on your grammar

bloombergcentral

Hi guys,

I really want to break into IB but I am from a non target. I have been networking a lot lately and have a few analysis who said they would forward my resume to hr.

Please let me know How I can improve my resume.

Thanks!

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WSO Resume Review Score*: 10 (out of 15 possible)

1. Wording/Bullets: 3
2. Layout/Format: 3
3. Overall: 4

• Note: This score is based on a subjective assessment of three different criteria all on a 1 to 5 scale (1 = poor, 2 = below avg, 3 = average, 4 = very good, 5 = excellent) based on my own experience reviewing thousands of resumes in the past and based on the current state of the posted resume.

Some explanation of the grading:

1, Wording/Bullets: This score represents the overall wording of the bullets and content throughout the resume. Are there action words? are the experiences explained clearly? Does the candidate quantify their impact where possible?

1. Layout/Format: This score represents to overall layout and format. Finance professionals are notorious for being anal. Although this score is somewhat subjective, there are certain things we look for including consistency, spacing, clean look, clear sections, proper order, good margins, etc.

2. Overall: This score represents the experiences and school of the candidate and is the hardest to change in the short term. Improving the Wording/Bullets and Layout/Format scores can bump this grade up (usually by 1 grade at most), however, this grade depends largely on the School, GPA, Internships, Leadership, Extracurriculars of the applicant, etc.

We are going to try to provide a candid / direct grading system for as many resumes as we can in this Public Resume Review forum, with the hopes that it will lead candidates that need help on #1. and #2 criteria to consider the WSO Resume Review service that has experienced professionals ready to help bring the #1 and #2 score as close to a 4 or 5 as possible. Due to time contraints, I can't provide more detail and I can only provide this grade to each candidate once (if you try to repost and updated version under a different username, i will recognize it and ignore). What I will say is that if you aren't at a 4 or 5 in Wording and Layout, we can probably help you make significant improvments.

Some more guidelines for total overall score:

3 - 6: Needs MAJOR help / improvements in several areas 7 - 8: Has some major flaws but also has some good areas 9 - 11: An average to slightly above average resume that could still use some help but it is on "ok" shape 12 - 13: A competitive resume that should be able to land some competitive interviews 14 - 15: An impressive resume on all or almost all levels. Wording/Bullets/Layout/format and overall experience, grades, school, etc are all excellent or very good.

We suggest if you score in the bottom 3 categories listed above that you strongly consider the WSO Resume Review service. Whatever you decide, best of luck!

Thanks, Patrick