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May 18, 2011

To many I's. IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII LOVE YOU XOXO G2G TTYL KTHXBAI CUNEXTTIME.

May 19, 2011

its a little bit wordy, try shorting it up some... other then that sounds good

May 19, 2011

personally? It lacks specifics. It conveys none of your passion. They deal with their clients on a personal basis - you know this how? Call them out on something more specific to them and say how it fits to something specific with you. You're an intern, not a CEO, they arent expecting divine inspiration, but want to know what you can bring to the party, what usually comes from p[eople with no experience is creativity. Is this even a trading role btw?

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May 20, 2011

Well, they have numerous awards highlighting their commitment to their clients. and its more of a PWM role/ loans.

I thought it showed and highlighted what i can bring to them, what would you suggest?

May 20, 2011

how can i give specifics if i dont know the company? If they are a good match for you this should be easy. What you're missing is examples.

e.g..
winning the suckoffaclient award demonstrates that you are ahead of the competition.

I enjoy going beyond the expected, as shown when I gave the old lady i mugged a ride home and a refund.

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May 20, 2011

lmao

May 20, 2011
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