First cover letter, how did I do?
I thought I would run this by you guys before sending it in. Be absolutely critical.
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I'm new to the site and to the overall application process so take my advice with a grain of salt. Overall the cover letter is a good start. Two areas of concern. First the first sentence int eh second paragraph is a run on and is rather vague. Really elaborate upon your experience at the PE firm. What were your responsibilities? How it is relateable to the division which you are applying to? Also expand upon your leadership experiences in your student clubs. These are the major problems which I see. Keep up the good work and good luck! PM me if you want any further explanations.
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